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Leiagirl
#3829317Friday, November 21, 2008 7:41 PM GMT

Happiness I thought happiness would never find its way Life with no happiness, what a sad day But I've got it here and now, and its here to stay Misery and anger, can go away. Happiness, was hidden in the gloom With no happiness, I was headed for doom Happiness is with me, it has grown And I'm just hoping it ain't a loan It is blossoming, like a seed that's been sown Having it here with me, makes me feel less alone. Happiness, was hidden in the gloom With no happiness, I was headed for doom A happy sun's, shining inside of me No more anger, or misery I'm much happier, can't you see And now I'm glowing, glowing happily! Happiness, was hidden in the gloom With no happiness, I was headed doom.
DizzyPippo
#3829347Friday, November 21, 2008 7:44 PM GMT

Its okay, maybe you should work on the rhymes and make the chorus longer... Other than that, good song
DizzyPippo
#3829400Friday, November 21, 2008 7:49 PM GMT

Maybe this for the chorus? Happiness, was hidden in the gloom With no happiness, I was headed doom I have it now, I'm getting more soon I now sing a happy tune! Maybe? I dunno, you decide
DizzyPippo
#3829886Friday, November 21, 2008 8:30 PM GMT

Nevermind, Im rubbish at rhymes
spork890
#3832857Friday, November 21, 2008 11:03 PM GMT

I like it.
mattiboy123
#3835567Saturday, November 22, 2008 12:53 AM GMT

y would nyone laugh at this, i mean, its good and it takes skill to make z song,
shaun436
#3854438Saturday, November 22, 2008 9:21 PM GMT

ya no one would laugh its a good song
Leiagirl
#3991576Saturday, November 29, 2008 4:13 PM GMT

Really? That one was a happy bubbly song (I hope) I have another, but its not done yet I was wrong, I realise, please listen while I say my feelings... I got the spotlight and you got some peelings Sitting in my shadow for so long, And I didnt see what was going wrong. Oooh, And I know, right now, that I confused my feelings And I know, right now, that what I said was wrong, And I know, oh yeah I know, thats why your gone Mmm. I was wrong, I realise, and I know that now you seem to be fading, I got the colours and you got the shadings Living with black for so long, And I didnt see what was going wrong. Oooh And I know, right now, that I confused my feelings And I know, right now, that what I said was wrong, And I know, oh yeah I know, thats why your gone Mmm. I havent worked out the tune yet
Leiagirl
#3991780Saturday, November 29, 2008 4:21 PM GMT

Please comment on the last one
DizzyPippo
#3993655Saturday, November 29, 2008 5:33 PM GMT

I think you have a talent, Leia
musicboy1
#3993886Saturday, November 29, 2008 5:44 PM GMT

yo this girl can rap.yo yo yo my name is thegame one and ill never be the same one.i will rap until i get a cap.my boss said it has to ryhme,for every rap he will give a dime.ohh there it is my cap omg is that dodo or what?WORD
Leiagirl
#3994881Saturday, November 29, 2008 6:31 PM GMT

Wow, guys, thanks, but Im not THAT good
Boyzone
#3996550Saturday, November 29, 2008 7:37 PM GMT

Leia, your songs have stolen my heart. Write more, they are beautiful
Boyzone
#3996565Saturday, November 29, 2008 7:38 PM GMT

Hey, we joined on the same day
blackgiraffe102
#3997832Saturday, November 29, 2008 8:34 PM GMT

It's better than I could ever do!Bigtime!
kitkat30
#4003139Sunday, November 30, 2008 12:05 AM GMT

They're good.The happyness one was... very... happy.
rocky713
#4003698Sunday, November 30, 2008 12:31 AM GMT

Im a peice of [email protected] compared 2 u
kennayownsu
#4010403Sunday, November 30, 2008 5:15 AM GMT

It's ok Its good
paclac
#4010416Sunday, November 30, 2008 5:16 AM GMT

Like the other guy, im crap compared to you.
jjtt11
#4010614Sunday, November 30, 2008 5:35 AM GMT

ok for the guy abouf me and who he agreed to you guys are mean i think its very nice
maddya13
#4010889Sunday, November 30, 2008 5:59 AM GMT

its pretty good
Leiagirl
#4013021Sunday, November 30, 2008 12:09 PM GMT

Thank you!
Spectrabox
#4013581Sunday, November 30, 2008 1:31 PM GMT

The first one was great but the second one needed a little more rhyme.
jjtt11
#4025097Sunday, November 30, 2008 9:28 PM GMT

and leiagirl your very welcome
Leiagirl
#4067812Wednesday, December 03, 2008 5:54 PM GMT

Thank you guys... Usually people who reply to threads are sarcastic jerks, and I didnt want to be laughed at.... but you guys are relly nice, and thanks for all the constructive comments

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