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Romeo listen up
Hey Romeo where’s your Juliet?
Or did you happen to forget,
That she loves you.
I know you love her too.
Hey Romeo what’s this I’ve heard.
I though you were as free as a bird,
But that’s not true.
‘Cause look what she makes you do.
Well, her father disapproves.
Her cousins all hate you.
The prince has sent you away.
You die a little each and everyday.
Without her!
You cannot live!
Without her!
You’ll never forgive.
OoOoO Without her!
Hey Juliet don’t frown.
I know he’ll come around.
I promise you.
He’ll do it for you.
Hey Juliet lift up your head,
I coulda’ taken you for dead.
Look what your doin’to me,
Look at me!
Well you think that no one cares.
You’ve taken all those stares.
You’re lost but no one will find you,
You’re beaten but no one minds you.
You’re lost and you don’t know.
Well follow me I know just where to go.
‘Cause without him.
Nothing really matters.
Without him.
All your dreams are shatters
Without him.
Ooooh Without him.
And you don’t know what your doing here.
The worst had come just like you feared.
You are all alone.
Like nobody’s home.
Romeo keep searchin’
We all no that you’re hurtin’
Deep down you’re right.
Keep fighting the un-fightable fight.
‘Cause without her.
Sometimes you die.
Without her.
You’ll always have to lie.
WOAH!!!
Without her!
I would really like for you to review it. |
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l3gosrocJoin Date: 2008-08-10
Post Count: 1067 |
is there a tune to it? |
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BCT4bctJoin Date: 2007-08-03
Post Count: 8796 |
Nice song! |
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well there is and it's sorta soft rock. |
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konan102Join Date: 2009-01-25
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nice. did u get the insperation for this song from a personal experince??? does it have a name? this would sound wicked in soft rock (like u said it was) or screamo. u should add me. i got a few songs too. |
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I got it alittle from personal experiences but romeo's part is literaly from romeo and juliet. it's name is Listen up Romeo |
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usually titles r based on coureses (forgive spelling) so id name it something like "Without" because u change from without her to without him but the without is still there. I like ur title this is just my opinion. |
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Id also make a few changes 2 lyrcs but when i make my band im gonna ask 4 us 2 b allowed 2 sing this song and if we mae a record ill give u 15 to 25 percent of money. |
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noidiocyJoin Date: 2009-07-15
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Kind of cheesey IMO. |
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actually if i made it i would call it "without love". |
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well i put it down there for a reason. Without doesn't really give the persona of the song. But Romeo listen up does. Because on juliet's part i'm telling Romeo to pick up his a-game. but thanks for your opinion |
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Dude to much rhyms and who makes songs about romeo and juliet make some music that someone will like |
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Ok well songs are rhyms. And why wouldn't i write a song about them they are a sybmol of love. But thanks and judging by some of the reviews i thinkk people like it so thanks. |
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Hailey010Join Date: 2008-07-16
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awsome im in a band and i know how hard it is to write a good long song good job :D |
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Hailey010Join Date: 2008-07-16
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and heres an idea why dont you put it on youtube someone big might hear it and also my moms best friend is a music producer hint hint send me a friend request |
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I still don't have guitar in it though my friends gonna teach me. but thanks. I've written a piece of another song it's not finished and not all that good. I just want to see how people like it. So should i post it? |
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With the ryhmes I read it as Rap. @.@ |
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GAgamerJoin Date: 2009-06-10
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hmm songs okay
im turkey you look hungry i must run from j00! |
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HAHAHA!!!!!!!!!! im laughing at ur song :3 |
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Ok guys tomorrow i'll post the new song i'm working on. |
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I readen it as rap or metal |
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