CazbloxJoin Date: 2009-05-04
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D: I'm not in........ |
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CazbloxJoin Date: 2009-05-04
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Did you not see meh request D: |
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DCKoolJoin Date: 2009-01-15
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I can gurantee you one thing: You are in. I just need to fit you in to the story, as the plot right now can't fit you in. |
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4curtis4Join Date: 2008-09-13
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Great so far! |
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CazbloxJoin Date: 2009-05-04
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YAY! |
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CazbloxJoin Date: 2009-05-04
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Wow, flood check is failing
(Me:4 Floodcheck:0) Wierd? |
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DCKoolJoin Date: 2009-01-15
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Bump to see what people think. |
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masterdylanTop 100 PosterJoin Date: 2008-08-13
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Make 7 part! :D |
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CazbloxJoin Date: 2009-05-04
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FREAKING MOAR PL0X |
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CatmandoJoin Date: 2008-11-24
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It's moving too fast, the settings need more descriptions, the chapters are too short, I know nothing about the characters, the plot is kinda overused, etc.
And, BTW, I'm not criticizing you, I'm telling you how to make it better. |
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DCKoolJoin Date: 2009-01-15
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Bump. Cat, the characters are well-known robloxians. Most of them anyway. You should know about them. |
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DCKoolJoin Date: 2009-01-15
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By the way, most chapters are like that. In roblox, not real life. If I wrote a real chapter it would take forever. |
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DCKoolJoin Date: 2009-01-15
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Depends =D |
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Hmmm, how does it depend? |
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DCKoolJoin Date: 2009-01-15
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It depends on depending. |
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Wow, what a magic world that is then. |
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Ummm.... can i g.et in... you don't have to p.ut me in the sto.ry but it wo.uld be ni.ce... |
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