Hunger Games [Blood Bath]

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#147780703Sunday, October 12, 2014 2:00 AM GMT

As the tributes rise in their tubes they wonder what the arena would be but what is the arena? The arena is a big Bio dome, including winter,summer,autumn, and spring. as the countdown starts all the tributes get ready, but one tribute fall off, Brian, and is the first tribute to die, as the cannon goes off for Brian's death. As Kate hears the cannon she freaks out and falls off at the last second, making Kate the 2nd tribute to die, and then the tributes run to the cornucopia. Carly was going for the knives with Tim, but Carly gets the first knife and kills Tim, The cannon goes off as Jake is getting attacked by Devin with a trident. Carly turns around seeing Jake getting attacked. While Carly runs, Devin is about to stab Jake in the stomach but Carly throws a knife at Devin and hits her neck, killing her, at the same time Henry Betrays her district partner, Zoe, and kills her with a axe. Jake goes for Liam as he trips over Victor and gets stabbed by him with a machete as he screams to death. Carly looks and runs over to Jake's body, crying for Arron and Ashley as Arron runs to Carly. As the career tributes and Victor are still at the cornucopia, as Ashly kills Victor with an arrow, and that concludes the blood bath. Dead Tributes (District Order) Jake D1 Tim D3 Devin D4 Victor D5 Zoe D7 Brian D12 Kate D12 Is your favorite tribute dead? if yes whos your newest favorite and post on the wall who will win!

BunnehBroDoesROBLOX

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#147782521Sunday, October 12, 2014 2:27 AM GMT

There's not enough story line to make favorites at this point.

xxBootyFlakexx

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#147786646Sunday, October 12, 2014 3:30 AM GMT

^lol ikr kill of Ashly she is become some sort of a Katniss. This should be in the Rebellion Era so the Star Squad can mess things up :3

MikZippers

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#147788368Sunday, October 12, 2014 3:57 AM GMT

Got bored about half way though.

BunnehBroDoesROBLOX

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#147831839Sunday, October 12, 2014 8:23 PM GMT

^ Got bored at the before I read it.

MrVincent

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#147831902Sunday, October 12, 2014 8:24 PM GMT

"big Bio dome, including winter,summer,autumn, and spring" ... those aren't biomes, they are seasons

BunnehBroDoesROBLOX

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#147832662Sunday, October 12, 2014 8:32 PM GMT

Good point Vince. Say, haven't we met before?

birm123

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#147832923Sunday, October 12, 2014 8:35 PM GMT

i stopped reading at the title

BunnehBroDoesROBLOX

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#147833023Sunday, October 12, 2014 8:37 PM GMT

I stopped reading... heck I didn't even read it. #SKEEEEEEEELZ

MikZippers

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#147836680Sunday, October 12, 2014 9:25 PM GMT

odang bunneh I want ur skillz

BunnehBroDoesROBLOX

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#147837087Sunday, October 12, 2014 9:31 PM GMT

Of course you do... *male hairflips"

Duncan2244

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#147864592Monday, October 13, 2014 3:50 AM GMT

There is no story to this; this is just a paragraph. There was noticeable grammar mistakes, no plot or story, and just overall bad. I got bored from reading this after about two or three sentences. There was no plot or description to give us an idea or picture in our head about anything. The "biomes" you refer to is seasons like Vincent said. You did not do a good job at writing this. My suggestion is that if you want to write a good hunger games story; take your time! I learned the hard way by posting my word vomit drafts of a current hunger games story I am working on and the embarrassment and humiliation you feel from people criticizing this makes you feel like a fool. Don't just rush a story. It takes time, thought, and effort to write a good story. If you want to write a story of the hunger games; put some thought into it and make it your own. It takes a long time but it is worth it in the end. Rating: 0.3/10

BunnehBroDoesROBLOX

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#147876620Monday, October 13, 2014 11:54 AM GMT

^ What he said.

xxBootyFlakexx

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#149621757Wednesday, November 12, 2014 2:28 AM GMT

^ what he replied

BunnehBroDoesROBLOX

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#149621938Wednesday, November 12, 2014 2:31 AM GMT

^ XD

TaiWolf1234

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#149622135Wednesday, November 12, 2014 2:34 AM GMT

>BunnehBroDoesROBLOX This is an example of a clown who is trying to win the favor of the RP forum by means of trolling. The exit is on your left, Bunneh. You can see yourself out.

jailbreak952

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#149624156Wednesday, November 12, 2014 2:58 AM GMT

mfw based tai

BunnehBroDoesROBLOX

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#149625702Wednesday, November 12, 2014 3:23 AM GMT

Excuse me- I am just stating my opinion and others agree. I see myself more of a dork then a troll, and more of a critic as well. And I won't exit.

BunnehBroDoesROBLOX

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#150123825Friday, November 21, 2014 1:36 AM GMT

So, yeah... I realized-- She chose to start a roleplay about an already successful series, because she was lazy and didn't want to take the time to make up her own story. Cliche.