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♦In a town far away,
♦The children used to laugh and play,
♦But now to this day,
♦The children can't ever play.
(Made a little poem there, you like?)
You are a child in the town Greckig on a secret island near the bottom of Africa.
You just ran away from your parents. Why?
The island has a thing for forcing kids into slavery. But only for their parents, of course.
Unless you run away, which you did.
What happens when you run away is a different story. The government comes to get you. They send men with guns. When the men catch you they put shackles on your feet and shove you into a van, where you'll most likely meet other kids, some your age, maybe some older, maybe some younger. But lets get to the point. These men don't care if you go back to your family, they'll sell you to some family without kids. So, you have to avoid these men, and survive on the streets.
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♦Dee CS♦
♦Name (no last name needed, you probably need to forget that):
♦Gender:
♦Age (7-13):
♦Personality:
♦Appearance:
♦Strengths:
♦Weaknesses:
♦Other:
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♦Rules♦
♦1: Don't have special powers, it isn't the future for god sake.
♦2: You can't look like a princess when you're on the streets, jeez.
♦3: No romance. Hugging is okay but NO FREAKIN ROMANCE.
♦4: Keep your cursing low, you're a child.
♦5: Don't be like -dodge- at every attack.
♦6: Have a heck of a time. |
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Name (no last name needed, you probably need to forget that): Rico Aswok
Gender: Male
Age (7-13): 13
Personality: Funny, brave, thoughtful, great leader
Appearance: 5' 11', usually says he's 6'.
Strengths: Puzzles, decoding, sneaky.
Weaknesses: Friends and family being hurt, candy.
Other: snicker snicker
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CoriandrJoin Date: 2014-06-25
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So...
We're supposed to be orphans?
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CoriandrJoin Date: 2014-06-25
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Eh, same difference. You pretty much become an orphan when you run away.
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I might join. Give me some time to think it over, where this could go, and then to make my CS. Well, if I do join, to make my CS.
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Oh my god...
NO CRITISISM?
DID I DO GOOD THIS TIME?
I'M CONFUZZLED! |
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♦Dee CS♦
♦Name: Cleo (Forgotten last name)
♦Gender: Feminine
♦Age (7-13): 12
♦Personality: Brave, shy, protective, leader-ish.
♦Appearance: Cleo has dirty blonde hair that falls to her shoulders, overlapping a bit. She has dark blue eyes. She wears a ripped gray long sleeve shirt and a pair of ripped jeans.
♦Strengths: Running, Climbing.
♦Weaknesses: Jumping long ways, bribing the grown-ups.
♦Other: Cleo has been on the streets since she was 7.
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It's pretty good overall, maybe a little bit expansion on the plot but otherwise, 8/10.
~Critic of Roleplay~ |
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CoriandrJoin Date: 2014-06-25
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CRITICISM!!!
Secret island? pft.
"Greckig"
Interesting name.
GOVERNMENT CONSPIRACY, MUN.
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Yap, dez all I got. :3
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See, Coriandr, that's not a good job critiquing because you don't provide any ways that they could maybe improve their writing. Instead, you just stated opinions.
~Critic of Roleplay~ |
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Did I actually finally have a plot?
OMG I HAVE A PLOT!
-dance- |
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Yey I'm accepted xD
@Bunneh
Accepted xD |
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Random Reasons To Things;
I NAMED IT PRESUMPTION BECAUSE I LIKE THE WORD.
NO BIO BECAUSE NOBODY WANTS TO HEAR YOUR HORRIBLE SLAVERY STORIES
EVERYONE GOES THROUGH IT. |
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D_sireJoin Date: 2011-11-27
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♦Dee CS♦
♦Name (no last name needed, you probably need to forget that): (Cleo one of my OCssss!! Hmm..) Blue-Raven. (Forgot last name :])
♦Gender: Feminine.
♦Age (7-13): 12.
♦Personality: She's pretty clever at complicated stuff, which makes her well-intelligent for her age. She can be cold and harsh at times, but she's pretty friendly and protective once you get to know her.
♦Appearance: She stands at 5"0, and weighs 91 lbs. She has radiant tan skin and dirty blonde hair, along with mismatched eyes. One is a deep brown and the other is blue-green. She has a small scar across her nose and a longer one across her left eye. She wears a worn-out black T-shirt and a pair of light blue skinny jeans, which are ripped at the knees. Finally she wears a pair of all-black Vans.
♦Strengths: Animals, (Used to train doggehs c;) and art, which she can really express herself in.
♦Weaknesses: Animal-cruelty, Society.
♦Other: Nawww. |
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(I look at my CS, then lols, now I'm slapping myself.) |
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CoriandrJoin Date: 2014-06-25
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See, Precision. That's not a good job at social skills, or discernment.
#Sarcasm
Learn it.
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@ Luna
Accepted.
We'll start soon .3. |
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(.3.) |
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D_sireJoin Date: 2011-11-27
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(I guess I'll make another CS, due to I'm bored like heck .3.) |
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