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Application:
Name:Lavender Brown
Weapons:rusty knife,scrap 7mm pistol (4/5 of a pack of ammo)(barely used)
Clothing:plain white tank top,bluejeans,black and blue sneakers
Food items:2/3 of a bottle of water,1 canned beans,1 canned fruit,3/4 soda bottle, 1 canned corn
Description of character:teenage,smallish,sharpish teeth
Human Sub-species:leopard
Proficiency:persuasion
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also...once again...ENOUGH WITH THE CRITICISM |
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North1233Join Date: 2014-02-06
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Sorry, It's still fvking bad.
#friedbutterfingerftw© Potato© |
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(Still, I'd advise specifying what model your pistol is. Also, I think a 17MM pistol doesn't even exist. Try 9MM.) |
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FrankiePCJoin Date: 2013-01-23
Post Count: 1105 |
@rock first, you are not accepted, and second, she said 7mm not 17mm. 3rd, she said SCRAP revolver. It isn't a model at all, just made from random parts.
@sassy Accepted. |
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Could you at least tell me whats wrong |
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some of the things in the C.S. you weren't answering and you didn't want to be a scavenger... |
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Dude, why not? Why can't I lone it?
Will the world explode if im not a scavenger? Like, allow some freadom at least. There was about one thing I didn't understand and I pretty much gave it some weak stuff. The FELIN was the first FAMAS prototype, and it had jamming issues. |
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Oh. Description.
Description: He has a rather thin frame. His hair is a goldy color, and he has black, curious eyes.
(Seriously, why must I absolutely have tobbe a scavenger? What if he never heard of them?) |
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ask frank...IDK...I just deal with it...you should too |
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and you forgot Human Sub-species |
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I just don't deal with it. I'm curious. I ask questions. I point out flaws. |
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and criticize people...who are you Gordon Ramsey? |
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I think brigond was acting like Gordon Ramsey.
I have stated multiple times criticism makes you a better writer. I want to help you
Let's not get the rp off topic. |
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FrankiePCJoin Date: 2013-01-23
Post Count: 1105 |
The reason you weren't accepted was not because you were OP, or just because you weren't a Scav. It was because 1. you had a group of NPC's to START WITH. and 2. The weapon isn't lore friendly. The jamming issue balances it, but you have to see that this game is 40 years after a NUCLEAR WAR THAT DESTROYED THE PLANET. The war probably would have damaged the gun alot, but all those years would have rotted and corroded it away. Now if you had a backstory of how the gun came to be... you'd be accept :P |
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1. Op? I had a few meager rations for Pete's sake, let alone two instant noodles packages.
2. Why do I have to absolutely be a scav? Why can't I be alone? That limits a role player's freedom, you know.
3. "Lore friendly"
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4. Dude. A gun is Usually made of metal. I don't understand how it would carrode.
5. War is fought with weapons. This includes nukes. Remember we already have thousands, even millions of firearms that would've been produced before this war. Hunting, militaty, cops, civilian shooting ranges, etc.
6. You didn't have a biography slot in the character sheet. How was I supposed to do that? |
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FrankiePCJoin Date: 2013-01-23
Post Count: 1105 |
1. i said NOT because
2. metal corrodes... *facepalm*
3. then add a biography? not a whole biography if you don't want, just something explaining how you GOT THE DAMN GUN IN SUCH FINE CONDITION. Like, for xample, a vault of preserved guns, or from the Gun Arsonists. |
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Well, okay, I'll add a biography. Is that okay or do I have use a katana now? (Sarcasm) |
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Biography of how he got the gun and shiznit:
Martin was a civilian. When the nukes came, he managed to find a pre fashioned bunker and stayed there. Inside the bunker he found someone had stowed away the FAMAS, the PROTECTA, and the KLMK suit. |
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FrankiePCJoin Date: 2013-01-23
Post Count: 1105 |
Great :D accepted. welcome, man. |
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FrankiePCJoin Date: 2013-01-23
Post Count: 1105 |
we got enough players now, so i guess now. I'll start the Scav adventure.
I woke up in the morning, just like I did every other day, I followed the same routine I did every other day, did 30 pushups and did a 2 minute plank. I went out the scrap door of my scrap house. I walked through the train tunnel swarming with the poor and hungry, and occasional mutant hunters dressed in black trench coats holding hastily put-together rifles of all calibers. As I moved towards the subway entrance, which was constantly guarded by at least 50 men, I saw someone dressed like the mutant hunters... staring at me. I put my hands in my pocket, kept walking and tried to pretend like I hadn't noticed him. I constantly glanced to the side, where the man in the black coat was walking almost parallel to me about 10 feet away. He too also glanced at me to check where I was. I went off course and into a tunnel that was accessible through a hole in the wall. I was going to be late for Scav duty, but, oh well. I came into a small "room" and walked around the corner. I drew my shotgun from inside my coat and pointed it at the entrance to the room . I heard footsteps and then I heard the man's voice, "I know this trick. You pretend to disappear, wait for me to enter the room, and blast me. I'm not falling for it."
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FrankiePCJoin Date: 2013-01-23
Post Count: 1105 |
bump |
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FrankiePCJoin Date: 2013-01-23
Post Count: 1105 |
bump |
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Marked maybe
And rock if you're gonna criticize at least know how to criticize. Not everyone has to be a gun freak to be a good RPer for Christ's sakes. |
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