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#159031006Tuesday, March 31, 2015 1:53 PM GMT

-Verse- God forgive me of my sins, I just wanted to be known See I'm on my rap thing but I wanted it to be for you They families is locked up, mom and daddy gone How can I repay you for this great life that you sown I wanna pray to you every day every night Because sometimes I just end up feelin' all alone I never thought that someone else's life was worse than my own I wanted and tried to be a king, When I know that you sit on the throne Fake like I'm the purest christian then when I go home I do all the things that Christ doesn't want me to do so I'm asking now GOD I NEED HELP FROM YOU I'm doing everything livin' life to the fullest But even when that meant livin' life like I don't know you I'm sorry God I'm sorry, I just needed to get this off my chest From now on I stay the same for Jesus Christ from east to west Its crazy I never knew it would end up like this I apoligize, for taking on Satans fake bliss It all ended up in a worldwide diss No love, nobody likin. I'm not used to this So yeah I'm out of my confort zone but this Means that the only person I can talk to is my sis I got to much on my mind, alot to reminisce But the big part that I mostly miss Is the church being there for me when I get hissed And when I got dissed and tiss tiss to me Just added onto a big list Of things that were wrong Asking myself how the world ended up like this I stay all messy like I'm eatin grits So I'm done with this terrible thing that I did Its crazy God because it won't be missed It got dismissed Gone

Sxperior

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#159031043Tuesday, March 31, 2015 1:54 PM GMT

Instrumental for this song: http://www.roblox.com/Rap-Instrumental-Beat-item?id=186302687

ChrisIsAGummyBearYum

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#159031858Tuesday, March 31, 2015 2:16 PM GMT

This is good, but try not to repeat words and use them for your rhymes. For example -- "And when I got dissed" "It all ended up in a worldwide diss" "No love, nobody likin. I'm not used to this So yeah I'm out of my confort zone but this " Other than that this is quality material. C'mon everyone, let's take a ride in my balloon / casino!

GrandMasterYodaSW

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#159032000Tuesday, March 31, 2015 2:21 PM GMT

Religion is a disease 0/10

DesiredShark

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#159032758Tuesday, March 31, 2015 2:40 PM GMT

God doesn't exist.

ChrisIsAGummyBearYum

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#159032832Tuesday, March 31, 2015 2:42 PM GMT

Don't even pay attention to them. They're trying to deny your religion just to anger you. C'mon everyone, let's take a ride in my balloon / casino!

Sxperior

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#159032950Tuesday, March 31, 2015 2:45 PM GMT

@Chris I don't, I have thick skin.

Sxperior

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#159033361Tuesday, March 31, 2015 2:55 PM GMT

And the repeating words, Sometimes I do it on purpose and it sounds good IRL, and sometimes I just run out of rhymes. But this WAS a freestyle so you gotta cut me some slack.

ChrisIsAGummyBearYum

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#159033453Tuesday, March 31, 2015 2:58 PM GMT

Understood. C'mon everyone, let's take a ride in my balloon / casino!

OMGITSTWIZZY

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#159033458Tuesday, March 31, 2015 2:58 PM GMT

you should learn how to write lyrics. that wasnt a diss but you need a rhyme scheme like abbacc, etc.

Sxperior

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#159033645Tuesday, March 31, 2015 3:02 PM GMT

Ik how to write lyrics... It was a freestyle. I pushed post without making any changes.

OMGITSTWIZZY

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#159033889Tuesday, March 31, 2015 3:07 PM GMT

"It was a freestyle." that wasnt stated so i just figured that you didnt know about rhyme scheme.

Sxperior

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#159034166Tuesday, March 31, 2015 3:13 PM GMT

Oh no, I know about rhyme scheme. But thanks for the advice.

TheUnknownZodiac

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#159034410Tuesday, March 31, 2015 3:18 PM GMT

ik this is freestyle, but, when you rap in general, work on multis, mosaic rhymes, rhyme schemes, you can't find alot about rhyming irl, so feel free to contact me. ~Or.gy Maker that's also a drug dealer and a goat.

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#159034489Tuesday, March 31, 2015 3:20 PM GMT

Thanks. @Devilish

TheUnknownZodiac

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#159034714Tuesday, March 31, 2015 3:24 PM GMT

you cant find much about rhyming on internet* wow.. I feel like nolife for messing internet for irl now. ~Or.gy Maker that's also a drug dealer and a goat.

Sxperior

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#159036312Tuesday, March 31, 2015 3:54 PM GMT

@Devilish Usually when I'm writing songs, Ill go over the scheme and such when i'm done then make the changes. Here i just said what was on my mind about the subject and tried to make it rhyme.

Enderman704

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#159036742Tuesday, March 31, 2015 4:02 PM GMT

I liked this, and like others have said, don't let the people who put down your faith get you down, and it's good to see a brother in Christ on here spreadin' the word again.

TaiWolf1234

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#159037944Tuesday, March 31, 2015 4:26 PM GMT

"Religion is a disease 0/10" "God doesn't exist." Just goes to show how intolerant some atheists are.

OMGITSTWIZZY

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#159038034Tuesday, March 31, 2015 4:27 PM GMT

"Just goes to show how intolerant some atheists are." how do you know they are atheists? you know, not everyone who doesn't believe in God is an atheist. Kind of shows you how ignorant some Christians are.

TaiWolf1234

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#159039252Tuesday, March 31, 2015 4:51 PM GMT

Because I'm pretty sure Desired has claimed to be atheist before.