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oh wait i guess he already died
this is amazing news
let's all celebrate!!!
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*FLAMES INTENSIFY SO MUCH THAT THEY ARE ABOUT TO BREAK THE FLAMING BARRIER* |
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are you mocking me now or are you just an idiot
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*FLAME LEVEL OVERLOADS AS THE EARTH FACES DANGER OF COMBUSTING* |
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yeah you have to be joking
no one is this stupid
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*FLAMES EXPLODE THE EARTH OBLITERATING HUMAN EXISTENCE AND ALL OTHER LIVING LIFE*
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i don't die
people like me live forever
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LiltechieJoin Date: 2015-02-14
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WHEN IS THE NEXT CHAPTER!!!!!!!??????????????
Poetry is sour... |
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and then a magical unicorn flys over everyone and poops on them and everyone dies
the end |
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AbsxlveJoin Date: 2012-06-21
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Pink, I'm proud. |
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the next chapter will be out when robloxfan and i are both online to do it together
so hopefully like later today or sometime in the next few days
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Pink, I am stunned at this, I just can't believe it..wow..JUST...WOW!!!!!!!
I-It is such..
A GIANT PIECE OF SHT U DCK SUKER |
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Story Tips:
Since everyone hated your last one, I would say ditch this and start fresh. Experiment a little. Try a different plot. From experience, not a lot of people like angel/fantasy/etc. One way to become a better writer is to exand to different areas of plot. Like, try to do Post Apoc or Past. Like I said, experiment.
Editing Tips:
Try to substitute boring words (ex: running) with better words (ex: sprinting).
Other:
Overall, this a marked improvment. You have got a sort of good grip at the Editing part. I just suggest doing something about the plot. |
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thanks mega
i'm going to write stories about other things, like i said before the only reason this was made was to show people that i've changed
this story is going to be pretty different than the last one though, and we might not do some things (like the yuri) in this one that happened in the last one
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ultra's probably sucked a lot more dck than i have, and i haven't even sucked any
i'm not even allowed to until marriage either, i love abstinence
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Don't let trolls like Ultra get to you. He is actually a good RPer when he's serious. |
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he keeps coming onto my threads and acting like a prick
i want to put him in his place before he does it to other people
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heyitsethJoin Date: 2015-05-03
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i can smell autism insults coming, im guessing peoplehate autistic people, not knowing how hard it is to go through autism, inconsiderate ret##ds
i can see improvements of what was so called a book. |
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seth, i agree that it is rude what people like ultra are saying, but calling him a ret.ard is just as bad and you know it
"what was so called a book."
i really wanted to say something there but i don't want to keep repeating myself lol
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heyitsethJoin Date: 2015-05-03
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i would also enjoy you making more books, so i think it would be nice to keep me updated |
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heyitsethJoin Date: 2015-05-03
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sorry, since my brother has autism i had to defend it.
now ultra is gonna target my brother like the try hard he is, lol. but whatever. |
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i also wrote another book with the help of tardy a while ago that people thought was pretty good
http://www.roblox.com/Forum/ShowPost.aspx?PostID=172608606
idk if i'm going to finish either one of these but whatevs ill start writing again soon
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Actually..I have a little brother who is 11 with severe autism. (aka he can't talk or anything really..) |
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heyitsethJoin Date: 2015-05-03
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so if you pretty much know the struggles of autism, why are you making fun of it?
they have feelings too you know. |
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seth stop trying so hard to start a fight with ultra
even he knows better than to give in to that
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