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Blank verse is in iambic pentameter, but without rhymes. Tell me if I got the unstressed/stressed syllables correct. Also feel free to criticize my imagery/language/choice of words/etc.
of lands obscured by mist, of green and gold
Palmetto King alongside his imposing host
and his amazing prowess with all arts
O muse, of this and more elucidate. |
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I was thinking of changing the "of" in the fourth line to "on". Any opinions? |
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caiceeJoin Date: 2011-02-08
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@caicee
I know you're not a spambot. Why did you post if you have nothing to say? |
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Bump. All I've gotten so far is spam. |
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Z0rr0wJoin Date: 2008-07-06
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>Palmetto King alongside his imposing host
I count twelve syllables here instead of ten.
Pal-mett-o King a-long-side his im-po-sing host |
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@Zorrow
Syllable counter says that you're right. I'll have to rework it. |
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@Zorrow
Thank you for that! I've corrected the problem and made to syntax clearer. This is what I changed it to:
of lands obscured by mist, of green and gold
Palmetto King, of his prestigious host,
and his amazing prowess with all arts
O Muse, on these and more elucidate.
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http://examples.yourdictionary.com/examples-of-iambic-pentameter.html |
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Oh no, i know what Iambic Pentameter is.
I was asking if it was in Iambic Pentameter, not realizing you had stated that in the post. |
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@Pirate
Ah, no worries. Did I get it right? Stressed and unstressed syllables often sound the same to my ear. |
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