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elijahiscool
#198023647Wednesday, September 07, 2016 8:18 PM GMT

https://www.roblox.com/games/303537556/The-War-Core-Hub Looking for ideas, criticism, etc. I tend to build for nostalgia sake, so the terrain is intended to be fairly simple/create more of a backdrop.
ArcticPatriot
#198024651Wednesday, September 07, 2016 8:35 PM GMT

I will give you as much advice as possible Hyper critical mode on. Remove some trees, too many; smooth out the edges of the entrance ramp(add something so it's not just a drop off); don't make everything so grid-ular (Everything is on straight lines, nothing is bent or rotated (Example: turn the planes slightly, so they're not running parallel to the entrance ramp)); make all the trees one type, or at least the same color schemes, so it doesn't mismatch; cover the mountain-wall that's missing; cover the baseplate to the left of spawn that has all your model buildings so you cant see it, or move it away; turn off outlines; add some benches that are just stand-alone, and separated from the others, then slant them; the back alley way has a ton of stuff near the back alone, and hardly anything leading up to it, add some more rubbish there; try smoothing out some of the wording; the statues dont seem like they were made the same way (the fountain one and the spawn ones), try re-building the fountain one; the meeting rooms are all the same, add variety; Also sarif industires logo which is from Dues Ex; might wanna make it blank; building is too symmetrical, add some extra details to add variety; WCoR logos at the front are un-even to eachother; elevators inside unfinished; not enough variety in the floors and how they look, throw in some plants or decorations. - Exemplar of Invicta | Passion. Courage. Commitment. Invicta. | Glory to Invicta -
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#198024699Wednesday, September 07, 2016 8:36 PM GMT

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ArcticPatriot
#198024733Wednesday, September 07, 2016 8:37 PM GMT

When I said "elevators unfinished" I didn't realize those pillars inside weren't elevators. And then just realized they were built like that. Ignore that one. - Exemplar of Invicta | Passion. Courage. Commitment. Invicta. | Glory to Invicta -
ArcticPatriot
#198024795Wednesday, September 07, 2016 8:38 PM GMT

When I said "elevators unfinished" I didn't realize those pillars inside weren't elevators. And then just realized they were built like that. Ignore that one. - Exemplar of Invicta | Passion. Courage. Commitment. Invicta. | Glory to Invicta - - Exemplar of Invicta | Passion. Courage. Commitment. Invicta. | Glory to Invicta -
ArcticPatriot
#198024894Wednesday, September 07, 2016 8:40 PM GMT

Double post. Also the WCoR logo on the floor inside is low res, try uploading an enhanced logo of it,and using that Also no one is looking up at the helicopters, they're too high up. - Exemplar of Invicta | Passion. Courage. Commitment. Invicta. | Glory to Invicta -
elijahiscool
#198026533Wednesday, September 07, 2016 9:05 PM GMT

Actual good opinions, thanks man. Yeah I need to get a good logo there, working on having a nicer one uploaded. I'm gonna def add some of those critiques to the place
ArcticPatriot
#198026592Wednesday, September 07, 2016 9:06 PM GMT

No problem. - Exemplar of Invicta | Passion. Courage. Commitment. Invicta. | Glory to Invicta -
ArcticPatriot
#198026680Wednesday, September 07, 2016 9:08 PM GMT

Just message me if you need any more of my critique, I can be very hyper critical when it comes to building. - Exemplar of Invicta | Passion. Courage. Commitment. Invicta. | Glory to Invicta -
elijahiscool
#198029353Wednesday, September 07, 2016 9:51 PM GMT

@Arc Yeah those Serif screens I put there originally before I made it for WCoR. I basically took the concept art for Serif HQ from Human Revolution and made this place, and that was when I wasn't scaling it, which is why the doors for the offices are taller than a player model.
ArcticPatriot
#198029693Wednesday, September 07, 2016 9:56 PM GMT

Ah, makes since then. Because I was going ###### ### ###### and people were there and said like 90% of it was FM'ed. So I presume the whole place was a "noob" creation you tried to make a while ago when DE:HR came out in honor of it? - ######## of ####### | Passion. Courage. Commitment. ######## | Glory to ####### -
elijahiscool
#198030949Wednesday, September 07, 2016 10:15 PM GMT

So the only free models I added in was stuff like a few desks because I liked the look of them. The offices I made from scratch, same with the rest of the building, which was based of off Serif HQ. The other stuff like trees were made by Quenty I think, and I added some 'clan relic' FM's for references to remind people of the old days. The entire place is supposed to look like it came from 2010/2011.

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