Rea_lmJoin Date: 2015-05-23
Post Count: 163 |
i hate that game
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I walk to the c e l l where Lucy is.
"Real smooth girl, real smooth." I say. "You seem strong, so I'll help you." I use a key card and open her c e l l door. |
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[Lucy]
"Thanks." I say. "I just overreacted, I've had major anger issues since.... I'd rather not talk about it." I walk away, prison is so hard, I thought I'd easily get a gang and escape. That's not happening. I take o ne last bite of my Apple and throw it away. I see prisoners staring at Me and whispering things. I would've ignored it, but I heard someone say, "there's the weak girl." I go over them and spam them into the ce ll door. "Who's weak now?" I say dropping him. 'I need a therapist or something, my anger is getting out of control!' I think. |
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North1233Join Date: 2014-02-06
Post Count: 9978 |
I have no words to describe how atrocious this roleplay is.
First of all, what the hell is "in teen years" supposed to mean? You could just put a regular number of years.
Oh, let me point out that OP's character's "bio" is so cliche I can't even describe it.
"Lucy was a normal kid, but when her parents died at a young age, she got furious."
Obvious "character is an orphan" cliche.
Obvious "parents were murdered" cliche.
"She was taken by the man who did it and taught to be evil."
What kind of child is taught to be "evil" by someone who murdered their parents? A child isn't that stupid, you know.
The grammar in this roleplay is just horrifying.
Forcing someone to only be in the OP's gang is stupid. Are people not allowed to be independent anymore?
registered sergeant of the goose army |
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"Lucy, if you want to escape, use your anger on the guards." I tell her.
I walk out of the c e l l rooms. I've been in jail before, and in this prison too.
"Behind that map." I say. "There's a tunnel."
I rip the map off the wall, and there is a large tunnel. "Let's go."
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(Can I join? Also, what's with the ridiculous spacing between categories? It makes it frustrating to have to scroll down.)
Name: Hyorinmaru
Gender: Male
Age: XVII
Appearance: Short. Hair dyed white, stands up into a spiky shape. Muscular.
Facial Appearance: Blue eyes, pale skin.
Crimes: He hasn't told anyone.
Backstory: He hasn't told anyone. |
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Oh wait, I didn't notice how bad this roleplay was.
If you want to make a real prison roleplay, contact me. This is just junk. Cliche, no description, no grammar, and all the characters are OP.
You don't just grab a cop's gun!
Where did you get the keycard from?
Why are you randomly allowed to walk around? |
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In part because the quality angers me, and in part because I like the barebones idea, I'm going to revamp this.
Check it out in a few minutes! |
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HenrypikaJoin Date: 2013-12-22
Post Count: 6727 |
PK STARSTOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOORRRRRRRRRRRRRRRMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMM |
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Dark, weren't you that bad admin for the ######## role-play? You forced people to stay on your plot, and you say this is bad. Go away you copy-cat-bad-admin-head |
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[Lucy]
I escape with him. |
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Dav id hid, in fear. He was watching still though, breathing hard. He had looked at the cops, then ran at them. He had beat up tw o officers, but got hit down after. He was sent back to his cell. The other officers were sent to the infirmary. Dav id had peeked at Lucy. And called at her:
"Oi Lucy! We gotta talk!" |
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First off, hold off with the copying accusation. It's gonna be a prison-themed RP, which people can do. I'm not going to have "it's a juvie prison" and the same character sheet. Besides, I'm not even sure if I'm going to do it.
Second, when I volunteered to do that collab, I was just rejoining the Roblox RP forums for the first time in a while. I used to be on here when I was younger, but I got my face bashed by soardlo and left in shame. These days, I'm interested in really RPing, and as some of you may know, I have made a bunch of failed attempts. (Dragonbloods, Shadow Wars, Angels of Blood, Solarion Shinobi, etc) When I did Flight Cancelled, I was still relatively new to the updated Roblox RP scene. I was also stuck with a collaborator who wasn't very active and demanded I do certain things (such as shutting down the RP at night.) Also, I made the fatal mistake of responding to trolls, and had a bunch of people who weren't agreeing on what was going on. Someone would be in the burning plane one second, then dead on the beach another. I stepped back for a week or so to study what successful RPs looked like, then decided to jump back into the genre with Arena of Honor, which since conversion into an ISRP/selective RP has been a success. I'm interested in trying to start another, so I'm doing a prison-themed.
I think this is a good response to each of the questions. If I've left anything out, tell me. |
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(By the way, just to comment, love how this RP just gets worse and worse. A random secret hole? No guards around? Wow...) |
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[Lucy]
I ignore David. Too late to turn back
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I block the tunnel with the map. I crawl through. But then I fall. Somebody has been through here since there was a hole in the tunnel. I then hit some water with a SPLASH.
"Where am I?" I ask. |
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[Lucy]
"I think you fell in the sewers. I'm coming down. We can escape with it." I say. |
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BANG
"What the heck was that?" I shout. I get out of the water and onto a weird marble feeling ground. "Also this no sewer." |
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Dav id is watching right behind an officer. The officer turned around.
SMACK!
Dav id had hit the officer.
He had robbed the officer of his gun, then took down tw o officers.
Later, he was hit down. |
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Ring!
Ring!
"Free time."
Dav id was not very active after the fight, he had just been reading a book he bought off some guy.
He had nothing else.
But since his cell was beside Lucy's cell, he called:
"Oi! Lucy!"
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Name:Alex
Age:15
Appearance: just a normal t-shirt and jeans.
Facial Appearance: short nose, big fore head.
Crimes: owning a rocket launcher (illegal weapon possession)
Bio: normal innocent kid, who then found a rocket launcher in his basement. He carried it up to another floor but he had bad timing and the cops saw him through a window and his rocket launcher.
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Name: Martin Herschel
Age: X V I
Appearance: Super Max overalls
Facial Appearance: Brown eyes, Fair skin, Black messy hair
Crimes: Creating and Selling arms
Bio: Weak but clever. Can Fix anything broken and extremely good with tech
Trap Card: Inb4. The enemies next attack will be used against them |
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