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So I want improve a story I call Spacial Element. I want to make it as original as possible, but at the same time have a little of all the elements of RPGs. I focusing on a Sci-Fi idea area, with added fantasy, twists, mystery, etc. Here's the link to the story: http://www.roblox.com/Forum/ShowPost.aspx?PostID=26291121&PageIndex=1
Now, I was thinking of breaking this down into chapters, about 20-50 pages long if it ever reaches there. The first chapter, a School type of thing, is where you learn and train to find out your specialties(You will get to pick though.), wihch will end up as your Class(Such as Swordsman, Archer, etc.). Just because you're in school, doesn't mean you won't get action. The government has found this school out, and has been launching attacks on it. You help defend your school in this part. While you are still learning, your are heavily defended by Rebel troops. That doesn't mean you won't get hurt.
Now there will be plenty of chapters going along with this, and I have figured out a great way to make a Class chart. So the Class you've learned is a low rank class. I've created a high rank and sometimes there will be a middle rank for it. I broken them up enough so that I can use it for reference when you have upgraded to another class.
The twists and mystery parts I've come up with is about the government. Something I can't give away, so it's a mystery, and it's a twist. So what do you think? Too much? Awesome? Just trash? Give ideas and opinions. If you do, I'll include you guys in the credits. Thanks a very much. |
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Spiderpig2398Top 25 PosterJoin Date: 2009-06-15
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Thanks. I will try to use this very idea for a video game you know. There aren't too many Sci-Fis here, or in the video game world. I'm not just some SSBB guy. I'm more than that. I've perfected my RP style too. My first story, Dead Forest, last two chapters, than died. Second story, The Marked Ones and Spacial Element(This was a fail.), The Marked Ones lasted 15 pages, Spacial Element, 4. So I decided, why not revive an old thread's name, and mix it up with everything everyone loves? This is how I got this. The story I have on it now is only a demo. |
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24 views and only one opinion? That's sad. |
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No it's not. It's just because I am speechless.
Congrats. it's good. |
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Why thanks. I think this will work out after all. The opinions I get, the more I'll be pushed to add more. I thank everywhere here on RP. You guys have inspired me to keep going with this idea. I've been driven to perfection. I just need to get it out there. |
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Lolt64Join Date: 2007-11-17
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That is absolutely epic! Maybe different classes for different elements....? I'll post a chart so you can understand it better.
Lightning element classes:
Beginner Static | Intermediate Zap | Expert Shocker
Water element classes:
Beginner Splash | Intermidiate Wave | Expert Flood
I know it's a pretty bad idea, but, I hope it helps ;D |
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Hydrokynesis:The ability of spawning, control and shaping water.
Freezonkynesis:The ability of spawning, controlling and shaping Ice
Pyrokynesis:The ability of spawning, controlling and shapping flames./ |
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Here are the races so far: Veeza, Chellu, Shubo, Jetova, Narute, and Mutodo.
The only thing of thought of right now is the Shubo, which is a bear turtle. |
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New race:Lunight Kind angel-like people who make the stars fall. They specialize in Long Range and Aerial Combat.
Shubo A bear turtle, that can relate to humans. They are as intelligent as them, and kind of look like them. They have light green skin, with claws of a bear, and everything else is human. |
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The [Insert element] mage is exclusive to the person who lives on [insert planet that is the same to the element]. Other classes will be introduced. |
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The starting class is Student. The branch classes are Apprentice, Thief, Soldier, Archer. More will come. |
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This is also a sign-up thing. Just keep following until I've got everything, and I WILL post the story.
New starting class: Animist |
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Hey. I could use a pitch in help. I'll give you credit for helping. So far I need races' looks, and what they are. |
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BJ100BLOXJoin Date: 2009-03-06
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Absolutely..... I have to make up a new word cus it was so gooD
Uberepiccasticallyerific |
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Heh. Man, this'll be epicness. Spacial Element, all the way!
Spacial Element-Chapter 1: Duck, Hide, and... School?
Is that a good name? |
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These comments just make me smile. I mean, I'm not doing this for fame, but for fun and you guys. |
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this will be fun, can'y wait :D |
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BJ100BLOXJoin Date: 2009-03-06
Post Count: 1390 |
Can you guys check my post Asahii Island |
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Can't*, lol, I'm trying to type with one hand because i hurt the other, its not turning out well... |
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Maybe in the story Dakness: has dark staffs Light: light staffs Lightning: lightning blades Ground : Rock fist(Gloves)
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I don't need items. I need ideas on races and Chapter names. |
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