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What Coco explained. I was just an average Robloxian, who was the Captain of a ship that got hijacked. Then the ship got damaged. And then it disappeared. My poor ship. Anyways you can see that for a few chapters, I was not the main character. It centered around other events like the Grizwold hijacking, the assasinations of Soonic and Donkeyo, Fort Celeste, Banland, and other events in the story. |
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Yeah, the majority of the chapters weren't about cookeh. Hey cookie, I was just on the "new" Area 51. And after seeing how much it sux, I really wish Joshosh's Area 51 was popular again.... |
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I read the first 5 chapters,It was excelent,I plan on reading the rest |
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See Cookie, you should start a series. |
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I have also added average people in my story too. In fact, i even asked for people to join my story. And I just added a new chapter in my story.
also cookie, split your story down to paragraphs. It hurts when people try to read it. |
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DarxiaJoin Date: 2010-07-28
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I commend you on your MASSIVE attention span to do this :) |
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@Brian: If I do that then I would have OD'ers in my story. |
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I don't care what the haters think. Cookie derrived the entire story from his imagination. He's got potential. For all we know someday Cookie will be a NYT best selling author. Appreciate his effort people. |
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Unlike my little brother I actually read this. I give it: 100 Good job! :D |
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I dont think I would be able to make a NYTBS but it is a possibility. I am thinking of making this story be turned into RL. And Cookie1024 would be Jim Kuxan! |
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this is probably the best C&G story I've ever read. :D |
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I realized that the plot focuses a lot on RAT and FEAR and YOU cookie....
There is a lot of dialogue but not much description put into the battles and wars.
The other clan leaders have a very small role in the story.
The plot is fine through your perspective since you take a HUGE role in the story.
I say this story gets a 6 out of 10. |
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Brian I bet you are just jealous that I finished my epic story before you did. And what is wrong with the author being the main character? I must say this story is a mix of 1st and 3rd Persons. 3rd because it is talked by a narrator. But 1st because the author is the main character. And the main plot is a huge war between RAT and FEAR. Then CNSC gets involved. That is why I am a character in it! And because this is Roblox, I cannot put too much desc in the battles. Otherwise I would get banned and no one would be able to read this story. So Brian, you are just jealous that a Rookie in Roblox Writing has a One-Hit Wonder. |
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I know Brian. The truth hurts like a plasma sword going right through your chest like Cookie1024 did to GenScar in this story. Yah it entered through his back and came out of his chest.
Owch. |
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You can't say somebody thinks too highly of themself when THEY DIE IN THE STORY THEY WROTE!!! Use that lovely brains of yours, Brian. |
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Lol My story has more views than this story. And besides, you tried to draw viewers onto this story by advertising on my story. Not cool. |
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All I heard was "my story" and "this story" and some flames.... |
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Wait a sec... How am I supposed to hear it when you typed it? *facepalm* |
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:/ coco, are you friends with cookie? It seems like you're just trying to support your friend. I think you're being bias. |
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Yea, im cookie's "enemiend" |
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