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''hey hey
heyyyyyyy''
yo dude i really
like this girl''
but i dont know what to
say to her she fine as
a little misses fine yo''
and i wannna make
her my girl'' hey but
i dont know what
too say too a girl
i like'' but all i can
say to ''describe her
she fine as
little mama mama''
and ''i never fell for
a girl like her like''
her now im feelin the music
around her around her''
now each time when i here
my favirote song i try''
to make her come too me
but a man just tryin
take her from me'' then a little
girl falls for me and i dont know what
to do'' so when the music stops
she runs to me i run to her''
then finnaly when the music
on i tell how i feel about her
then she says she feels
the same way about me''
so i ask her out
she says yes in a high low
voice'' then when the music
stops i ask for her number''
she gives too me
we talk all day and all
night were chillin
in my suv swimmin
in my pool''
yeah i sang this cause i like a girl but i dont know how to tell her plz comment on telling me what should i name it
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Make it rhyme more I didn't see a single rhyme in that.
P.S The girl I love. How's that? |
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the girl i love sounds good but what do u mean by ryming it sounded ryming |
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wut music type is it going to be if rock or punk ithink it should be named "who cares"not making fun of your song but as a serious title. |
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send me a friend requst anyone |
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who goes to fuisonfall.com |
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rikkiJoin Date: 2007-10-21
Post Count: 987 |
*Drops Dead*Yo... That was... that was... AWESOME!!! OH MY LO- HOLY- OH- wow. That was totally awesome, dude! I dig your reason for writin' the song, too.
Keep rockin'! |
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rikkiJoin Date: 2007-10-21
Post Count: 987 |
Y'know, I've heard alot of songs that don't rhyme, but they sound so awesome, my brains tellin' me it rhymes. So, I dn't really think that song needs to rhyme. All it needs is a good singer and some sweet musicians, and it'll be a-ok, dude! |
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The songs good, but it needs something. I think you need the chorus, and some rhymes to make it smoother. I think it's just a little bumpy. But, how about this for a name.
Tippin' Forward
or
Tippin Forward Love |
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my heart hurts from head to toe |
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i made it up in 1minute but in the middle part i dont get what u was talking about |
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kyrudaJoin Date: 2008-03-18
Post Count: 5592 |
Ok, IT DOESNT RYME! I COULDNT PUT A BEAT TO IT AND IT DOESNT RYME AT ALL. If your wondering, this is ryming: I have a hat. It looks like a bat. This is not ryming: I like that girl because. she is really cute. =_= |
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KalphisJoin Date: 2008-07-05
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how about "Dream Girl"?
that would work |
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it needs some work on the catchyness scale |
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