agntclankJoin Date: 2010-02-19
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Prologue:
It was a rainy night. Sirboss was sitting at his desk, home alone, testing out the car Agntclank had given him. Hearing creaking noises, he jumped up like his favorite book character, Alex Rider would have. He opened his desk drawer, pulled out a gun, and turned around swiftly. Sirboss dropped the gun when he saw what had crept up behind him. It looked like…like something unimaginable. It looked…like a horrid creature from the realm of Hades. And the worst part was, it looked hungry. Sirboss slowly crawled backwards, reaching behind his back and scanning his palm onto his mouse pad. Sirboss’s computer and desk slid aside, revealing a door. Sirboss turned and ran inside, sealing the door as he ran. He kept on running and didn’t stop until he reached an elevator. Running inside, he strapped in and quickly dropped 13 stories. Thirteen….Sirboss’s lucky number. Once Sirboss was in his bunker, he weaponized. He grabbed weapons that weren’t even legal in the underground world of mafias. The creature materialized in front of Sirboss. Sirboss had never been this scared in his life before. He asked, timidly, “Wh…what are you?” The creature said, in a ghastly voice, “I am Timeboss. I have come to take your soul.” This was the last time Sirboss was seen in the real world.
A similar visit was made to: Sonicthehedgehogxx, Headspark, Evelio95, Briank2355, and The13thHippie. Four days have passed. None of these people have been seen since. Groups are struggling to protect their high ranks, however, we think the attacker was out to destroy F.E.A.R. only. F.E.A.R. has plunged into chaos, and ColourTheory is trying to save F.E.A.R.
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ryry60100Join Date: 2009-09-04
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Lame story, bro. |
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agntclankJoin Date: 2010-02-19
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At least I don't look like a tree. |
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ryry60100Join Date: 2009-09-04
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That's too bad. |
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agntclankJoin Date: 2010-02-19
Post Count: 709 |
Chapter 1:
A man awakens in a strange area. He remembers nothing. He looks around, he can tell its night-time. Where, he can’t tell. It’s as if…as if he’s just been born. He gets p and trns around, and to his surprise, there is a figure standing there. The figure approaches, and soon, the man can see who is in front of him. It’s another man, same height as him. This man looks like he has authority. Introducing himself, he says, “I am Timeboss.” The man says, “Who…who am I? I don’t remember anything.” Timeboss replies, “All is well. You had to have a brain transplant. All will come back to you soon enough, as soon as our advanced technology is done with its work. The identification we found on you said your name was Sonicthehedgehogxx. Welcome Sonic.” The man, now called Sonic, is puzzled until lights come on, and he realizes he had been in a hospital bed. All of a sudden, a look of enlightment appears on his face.
Sonic follows Timeboss into a room. Here, Timeboss says, “Here is your room Sonic. We are having some issues right now, so I would appreciate it if you stayed here. If you would like anything, dial one on the phone over there.” Sonic replies, “Mhm,” and heads for the desk, turning on the computer. Timeboss quickly rushes over and says, “NO! Don’t approach computers of any sort, it could affect your memory returning.” Sonic halfheartedly replies, “Ok. I guess.”
*To be continued*
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ryry60100Join Date: 2009-09-04
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So much lameness so little story. |
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agntclankJoin Date: 2010-02-19
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Chapter 2:
Agntclank wakes up halfheartedly, it’s been four days since Sonic and the leaders disappeared. He still hasn’t found any clue leading to their disappearances except for a note, placed at each of the areas they disappeared from. This note is brief and says nothing but, “The god of time has claimed this soul. The god of time shall prevail. Beware!” Agntclank is frustrated, but heads down to the HQ. He walks into his office and closes the door. He pulls a book down from the shelf, not to read, but to active the elevator hidden behind the bookcase wall. Replacing the book, he walks into the elevator and waits for it to plunge 13 stories. Thirteen…that was the standard number of stories for underground bases made by F.E.A.R. Apparently thirteen stories hadn’t been enough to protect Sirboss.
Shadowlugia500 had everyone leave his office. He told his secretary to let Agntclank in. Agntclank had been Shadowlugia500’s main helper for the past three months, and he was especially needed now. Shadowlugia500 ushered Agntclank in and pressed a button on his desk, bringing lead sheets down over the whole room. The lead sheets were a new installment, they were to keep out this creature that had attacked the Leaders. Shadow began speaking, “We have reason to believe that the missing Leaders have lost their memory. We think it may be part of a bigger plot.” Shadow is interrupted when the lead door to his office opens. Persistentdata, or Emess, walks in. “Hello,” she says, “its complete,” she continues, mainly addressing Shadowlugia500.
“Ahh,” says Shadow, “perfect, I was just about to inform Agntclank of our predicament.” Shadow brings a screen down. “Ok,” he says, “most of the leaders had trackers injected in them. The first few hours after they disappeared, we were tracking them. However, after that, the trackers were deactivated. We believe they are flying in a scramjet, unfortunately, we believe it was one created by you Agntclank.” Agntclank looks horrified. Shadow continues, “As I said, we have reason to believe that they have lost their memory. I have had Emess here build a device that will allow us to project dreams to them, to help them remember who they are. However, we are not sure this could work. We also know that if we retrieve them, we can instantly return their memory.”
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ryry60100Join Date: 2009-09-04
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That last part was only good cause it mentioned Shadow. Had you included the hidden weapon stash for the scramjet, like I suggested, that wouldn't have happened. |
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agntclankJoin Date: 2010-02-19
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You don't get the story yet do you? They don't know they're being kidnapped. |
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agntclankJoin Date: 2010-02-19
Post Count: 709 |
Thanks. |
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spongixonJoin Date: 2010-05-13
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Cool story bro |
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im liking tha story so far since im in a FEAR loving group B.B.T. and im very loyal to FEAR im wondering if youll make more and if i could make sugestions for the coming chapters |
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bloodbredJoin Date: 2009-08-12
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Protip:
Make them more spaced out. For some people when words are clustered into one huge paragraph, it gives them headaches.
Overall, it's pretty decent. 7/10 so far. ;) |
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bloodbredJoin Date: 2009-08-12
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I <3 the Alex rider series. *FTWFTWFTW*
Have you read Ark Angel yet, agntclank? |
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Marth31Join Date: 2009-04-08
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tl;dr
GET TO DA POINT SIR.SUM IT UP O_O |
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Sweeeeet story brohan, if Timeboss gets fliboys make sure that I help to get him back, after all, I am his main help, and nothing would stop me from saving him :) |
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akatukierJoin Date: 2010-07-21
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Im not into reading :\ |
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bloodbredJoin Date: 2009-08-12
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@ryry
It could be SHADOWTHEHEDGEHOGXX. :P |
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bloodbredJoin Date: 2009-08-12
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@Ryry
Nvm. Forget what I said. :3 |
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Thats was probally the most epic story rescue plot ive ever seen. I hope the leaders come back |
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Hey all haters, what do you get out of hating? Do people pay you to do it? If you don't like the story, thats fine, but on most the forums on Roblox, over 90% of posts are hates, don't likes, lames, sucks, and all around pointless negative comments.
If you don't like it, thats fine, but do you RREEAALLLLYY have to say so? Who wants the opinion of a jerk? No one does. Do you really get pleasure out of being mean?
If so, you are just a bully, and if you don't change, people will hate you. I am trying to help people who see mostly negatize, to see more positive. I am an extreme Anti-Hater. Sure, I get angry, all the time. Sure, sometimes I act spiteful, but I regret it later.
In fact, if you respond spitefully to this comment, I will ignore it, but on top of that I will know that you take pleasure in being mean, so I will try to HELP YOU. Help you see more positive.
You may think I'm a hippie, and go ahead. Think that. I don't care. You don't like in a household of seven annoying humans without learning patience and how to just let it go.
I said "humans", because humans make mistakes. They cause problems. "Humans", are annoying. It is not pixels that are annoying, it is the people controlling them. When was the last time you took time to look at the person, BEHIND, the pixels.
I don't mean whether or not they are as hot as their avatar, or if they have nerdy glasses, I mean, look at their character. You don't need to see the actual person behind the pixel, just see their personality.
What I've been building up to is, would you be that mean if you were talking to the real "Human"? Face to face? Person to person, not, pixel to pixel?
Maybe you would, maybe you wouldn't, but if it would not change a thing, that is a real problem. If it would, then great, you are not mean. You are just mean, because MAYBE, in real life, someone is being mean to you.
If you realize that that might be the person who it did not matter, then I encourage you to Private Message me. It is called, a "Private" Message. No one but me and you will know. I won't tell anyone, and you won't tell anyone unless you want to. Please, if you noticed that problem, mabye start focusing on being kinder, both to the pixel, and the person. |
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BTW Agntclank, love the story man. |
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