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ali904
#5929871Thursday, February 26, 2009 11:31 PM GMT

she mudered jango =^{,thats just not right plz change it naomi plz!
naomi101
#5936716Friday, February 27, 2009 2:48 AM GMT

cant. the deed is done.
naomi101
#5969427Saturday, February 28, 2009 3:14 PM GMT

Chapter 9: Hugs & Misses "I loved him very much. I need to love someone." Rainbow said. There was a cat who loved her, but he was a pet. His name was Smokey. Smokey has admired Rainbow for a long time. She was everywhere he looked. But today he decided to tell her how he feels about her. He searched everywhere for her but finally he found her. "Hello, Rainbow." he said. "Ahhh! Who are you and how do you know my name?" she screamed. Smokey realized she didn't even know his name. Rainbow looked at his collar. "You're a pet?!" she yelled. So Smokey said"Well I really like you and-" Rainbow, out of nowhere she scratched him deep in the nose. "Sorry, I don't mate with pets." she said. "A simple no would have been fine!" he shouted at her. He was muttering something to himself as he walked away. But the thing was that Rainbow liked him back.
naomi101
#6546226Thursday, March 19, 2009 2:46 PM GMT

Chapter 10: An Unbelievable Murder "Oh, Ghost, what should I do? I messed things up big time with- oh I don't even know his name!" Rainbow cried to her friend, Ghost. "Oh you got it bad!!!" said Ghost. Meanwhile back on the pet side... "She is gonna pay for breaking my heart!" Smokey said to himself. Later that night Rainbow and Ghost decided to search for Smokey. After an hour they finally found him. "I'll leave you two alone." Ghost said as she left. "Listen, I'm very sorry about the other day." Rainbow said. "Listen, I do still like you but I'm afraid what I'm about to do is for the best. This is gonna hurt me more then it will hurt you" Smokey said. Rainbow didn't know what he meant... until his claws came out. Then Smokey said, "I'm sorry my love." Rainbow didn't even have time to scream. Smokey had murdered Rainbow.
goldbox
#6547118Thursday, March 19, 2009 3:47 PM GMT

i think its good
naomi101
#7135098Sunday, April 05, 2009 7:50 PM GMT

ty
naomi101
#8779308Friday, May 22, 2009 4:52 PM GMT

just so u know Ghost is one of Scar's and Jango's kits
naomi101
#8779543Friday, May 22, 2009 5:05 PM GMT

Chapter 11: Oh My God! Ghost heard a weird silence. She looked around the corner and saw Rainbow dead! "What happened?!?" she screamed. You know what? I don't care what happened. Because I am going to kill you!!!" Ghost shouted at Smokey as she got in pounce form. But as she pounced something or someone got in front of Smokey. It was a deep, dark, and strong tom-cat. "May I help you?'
naomi101
#8779892Friday, May 22, 2009 5:26 PM GMT

Chapter 12: You?!? Ghost couldn't beleive her eyes. "Daddy, is that you?" she said. "Ghost? What are you doing here?" he said. "I should ask you the same thing." Ghost replied. "Wait. Jango you're her father?" said Smokey. "Yes and proud of it!" Jango said. "Wait, wait, wait. How do you know my father?" Ghost interrupted. "Jango, you never told her?" Smokey asked. "Told me what?" she asked. Then Smokey said, "If Jango is your dad then I'm your uncle." "It's true." said Jango. "You used to be a stray?" Ghost asked Smokey. Then Smokey said, "No, you and your dad used to be pets."
yuginow22
#8910646Tuesday, May 26, 2009 12:21 AM GMT

What a twist!A wonderful story so far but the thing is it has too many twists you shouldn't make it like that.
naomi101
#8934694Tuesday, May 26, 2009 8:54 PM GMT

but twists build tention
cjcole1
#8996078Thursday, May 28, 2009 7:23 PM GMT

this reminds me of the series Warriors by Erin Hunter
naomi101
#9036319Friday, May 29, 2009 10:18 PM GMT

cool i love that series
naomi101
#9171944Tuesday, June 02, 2009 4:52 PM GMT

tell me if u like the series cause if u dont im gonna stop them
yuginow22
#11507669Tuesday, July 21, 2009 5:21 PM GMT

It's a good series but the twists don't add up at all.
william12726
#12538933Saturday, August 08, 2009 9:29 PM GMT

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yuginow22
#13708275Tuesday, September 01, 2009 11:33 PM GMT

lol
goomboo2009
#14662149Saturday, September 26, 2009 8:06 PM GMT

i dont want 2 admit this but it kinda made me cry
ninetails33
#28650439Monday, July 05, 2010 4:43 PM GMT

This Sucks Horribly...

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