ali904Join Date: 2007-12-05 Post Count: 5 |
she mudered jango =^{,thats just not right plz change it naomi plz! |
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naomi101Join Date: 2008-05-12 Post Count: 41 |
cant. the deed is done. |
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naomi101Join Date: 2008-05-12 Post Count: 41 |
Chapter 9: Hugs & Misses
"I loved him very much. I need to love someone." Rainbow said. There was a cat who loved her, but he was a pet. His name was Smokey. Smokey has admired Rainbow for a long time. She was everywhere he looked. But today he decided to tell her how he feels about her. He searched everywhere for her but finally he found her. "Hello, Rainbow." he said. "Ahhh! Who are you and how do you know my name?" she screamed. Smokey realized she didn't even know his name. Rainbow looked at his collar. "You're a pet?!" she yelled. So Smokey said"Well I really like you and-" Rainbow, out of nowhere she scratched him deep in the nose. "Sorry, I don't mate with pets." she said. "A simple no would have been fine!" he shouted at her. He was muttering something to himself as he walked away. But the thing was that Rainbow liked him back. |
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naomi101Join Date: 2008-05-12 Post Count: 41 |
Chapter 10: An Unbelievable Murder
"Oh, Ghost, what should I do? I messed things up big time with- oh I don't even know his name!" Rainbow cried to her friend, Ghost. "Oh you got it bad!!!" said Ghost. Meanwhile back on the pet side... "She is gonna pay for breaking my heart!" Smokey said to himself. Later that night Rainbow and Ghost decided to search for Smokey. After an hour they finally found him. "I'll leave you two alone." Ghost said as she left. "Listen, I'm very sorry about the other day." Rainbow said. "Listen, I do still like you but I'm afraid what I'm about to do is for the best. This is gonna hurt me more then it will hurt you" Smokey said. Rainbow didn't know what he meant... until his claws came out. Then Smokey said, "I'm sorry my love." Rainbow didn't even have time to scream. Smokey had murdered Rainbow. |
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goldboxJoin Date: 2008-05-17 Post Count: 92 |
i think its good |
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naomi101Join Date: 2008-05-12 Post Count: 41 |
ty |
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naomi101Join Date: 2008-05-12 Post Count: 41 |
just so u know Ghost is one of Scar's and Jango's kits |
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naomi101Join Date: 2008-05-12 Post Count: 41 |
Chapter 11: Oh My God!
Ghost heard a weird silence. She looked around the corner and saw Rainbow dead! "What happened?!?" she screamed. You know what? I don't care what happened. Because I am going to kill you!!!" Ghost shouted at Smokey as she got in pounce form. But as she pounced something or someone got in front of Smokey. It was a deep, dark, and strong tom-cat. "May I help you?' |
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naomi101Join Date: 2008-05-12 Post Count: 41 |
Chapter 12: You?!?
Ghost couldn't beleive her eyes. "Daddy, is that you?" she said. "Ghost? What are you doing here?" he said. "I should ask you the same thing." Ghost replied. "Wait. Jango you're her father?" said Smokey. "Yes and proud of it!" Jango said. "Wait, wait, wait. How do you know my father?" Ghost interrupted. "Jango, you never told her?" Smokey asked. "Told me what?" she asked. Then Smokey said, "If Jango is your dad then I'm your uncle." "It's true." said Jango. "You used to be a stray?" Ghost asked Smokey. Then Smokey said, "No, you and your dad used to be pets." |
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yuginow22Join Date: 2008-06-16 Post Count: 51 |
What a twist!A wonderful story so far but the thing is it has too many twists you shouldn't make it like that. |
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naomi101Join Date: 2008-05-12 Post Count: 41 |
but twists build tention |
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cjcole1Join Date: 2008-05-27 Post Count: 2 |
this reminds me of the series Warriors by Erin Hunter |
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naomi101Join Date: 2008-05-12 Post Count: 41 |
cool i love that series |
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naomi101Join Date: 2008-05-12 Post Count: 41 |
tell me if u like the series cause if u dont im gonna stop them |
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yuginow22Join Date: 2008-06-16 Post Count: 51 |
It's a good series but the twists don't add up at all. |
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yuginow22Join Date: 2008-06-16 Post Count: 51 |
lol |
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i dont want 2 admit this but it kinda made me cry |
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