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California, California. That's what I represent. Ocean Beach, Ocean Beach. That's what I really meant. When you walk into the hood, hey, everybody knows ya'. And you always gotta catch what this crazy life throws ya'. Sometimes you call it rapping, sometimes I call it rhyme. And then we all try to hurry even when we got time. And all the other people, they always ask for something. They don't understand, us rappers started out with nothin'.
(Chorus)
The life, the life. The rapper's life. The life, the life. The rapper's life. Every time you fall you get back up again. Who cares about the snobby texts the rich girls send, you know that you're amazing, and you're better till the end. We all live the rapper's life and we live it till we dead.
(Verse 2)
You wanna try me boy? Oh, not till I'm dead. And you can except your eyes to be taken from your head. For you, rapping's just another way to cuss, and then, you say that you're better than us. So, we came over here to say you're wrong. And, we've got a lot to proove, and it's all in this song.
(Chorus x2) |
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Jared343Join Date: 2009-03-02
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^ This. |
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Pretty good,could be ALOT better though. |
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altar30Join Date: 2010-11-26
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I like the song but I feel like it would be better if you wrote the lyrics the way lyrics are supposed to look.
Like this,
Then the next line,
Boom new line
Other than that,
It's cool :D |
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link6249Join Date: 2011-01-06
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>_< |
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gamert7Join Date: 2008-11-18
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Real talk, it was just words rhyming no emoticons or anything real it was kinda like listening to my old grandpa ramble but happen to rhyme while doing it. You sound like you think people are asking for something. Nobody is, well except maybe different song lyrics. There was no topic if this was about a rappers life a real rappers life it would have signs of depression anxiety, and sometimes hatred. Because, you can rap about the hood all you want but, unless you have been there it is obvious you are rapping just to rap. "Gucci Mane anybody?" You also do not understand people either i do cuss in my raps i will not lie. But, when i rap i use what ever emoticons i am feeling, not to just have a excuse to cuss. If you notice you rhyme the same words A LOT examples "The life, the life. The rapper's life. The life, the life. The rapper's life" "we live it till we dead" "Oh, not till I'm dead" i do not like to say it but, it seemed like you had no vocabulary. So rating 0/10 because, there was so much wrong with it. Anybody who says this is good is straight tripping. It needs a lot of work and needs more then anything FOR EACH VERSE TO BE 32 Lines "16 BARS" IF IT WAS 3 VERSES A MANDATORY 16 lines "8 BARS" TO MAKE UP 64 LINES "32 BARS" |
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gamert7Join Date: 2008-11-18
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You my friend are upset because i told you your song sucks because it is not a song. |
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Why do rappers glorify poverty and red lining so much these days? Before it was all about getting OUT the ghetto now they want to get back in.
"Ifta ya simsim!" - Open Sesame |
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gamert7Join Date: 2008-11-18
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Wait for it wait for it. Okay it all happend when eminem broke mainstream he talked about poverty and such "rock bottom" and that is how it has been since. |
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But living in a one bedroom apartment with 8 kids and no electricity isn't remotely cool or something anybody should aim for.
"Ifta ya simsim!" - Open Sesame |
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gamert7Join Date: 2008-11-18
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No, not at all some people like to think it is, but, they have to be as close to their idols as possible. Ya know. Though what i meant was when eminem put out the song rock bottom people stopped writing about their struggles and created them. Ya know like good imaginative writing. |
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@mental stfu, if ur not gonna say anything nice dont say anything at all! |
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What are you my grandmother what normal human being says that |
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gamert7Join Date: 2008-11-18
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Yes, indeed she is, or else she would know songs have a topic and usually make sense. |
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Hey,it's my first rap so don't be so rude about it. I bet you guys couldn't make a better one.Maybe you guys should sit in the corner and think about what you've done.
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Not glamorizing poverty. I'm talking about how making my songs might help me. Okay. My family didn't think I Could do nothing either.... I'm sticking with just sitting back and watching my brother get everything, :( |
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Why did I think she was going to tell us about a rappers life? Like what I dunno |
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Errrr sorry *Like I dunno. |
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Now, I'm not gonna try and nock ya down dude. Ok, it wasn't the best robloxian rap out there but it's your first try at one, so don't go taking all this critersizm too personaly, it's pretty good for a first try, if you can make it better, than go ahead, no-ones stopping ya from singing. |
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lol. all i gotta say, lol. |
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