altar30Join Date: 2010-11-26
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(This is a song I wrote like a year ago and just found, tell me what you think)
I'm a Peter pan man jumping out windows without a parachute,
Torturing captain hook on his own boat before I shoot,
Then call up my fairies in never land,
And tell them I don't believe so they pass out on quicksand.
I'm breaking into tree houses without a ladder,
Soon as I get in tinker bell hides me under,
The bed with her nice little magic that made me shrink,
Now Christopher Robinson walked in and I'm starting to think,
What's he doing here, Poo's in another story right,
Ya I'm sure so I got ready to fight, but kept hiding,
Then I started finding,
A lot of guys were walking in,
Chris here was committing a sin.
I got outta the bed and he asked are you the next one,
I said listen here son,
I'm not that open so don't ask me again,
But he did so I threw him out the window from where I got in.
Gators greet me when I stop by and meet em,
Jump out the window, youll fly if you believe...... oops I just killed them.
Well does never land have Halloween cause I'll call that a set,
Then feed the blood to a nice dog I just met,
It was a stray but now it won't stay away.
2 clicks now puppies gone, it was fate,
Time to head home from never land cause it's getting late.
I get home and my mom asks how was my day,
I tell her nothing, really what was I supposed to say. |
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10000/10
Great.
sorry i had to delete the Comment plz: up dere.(for posts)
it was too long. |
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Nice.
Real Hero's don't need Capes.
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JubrilMDJoin Date: 2011-03-30
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Wa bam man! |
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altar30Join Date: 2010-11-26
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Lol thx, appreciate the support, any feedback like what you liked and what you didn't? |
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ducky980Join Date: 2012-09-01
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1. Have you ever saw thee movie? Most of that never happened
2. It was just a badtopic to start with
3. You rhymed with papshute with shoot (2 syllables 1 syllable) (and h0m0phones)
Thats mai advice! |
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altar30Join Date: 2010-11-26
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^ The song is about me going to Neverland, other than that its not supposed to relate to the movie. Thx for the feedback though :) |
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ducky980Join Date: 2012-09-01
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hiz name was pan duck |
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altar30Join Date: 2010-11-26
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Lol ok then |
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Ducky, every single Ro-Song on the forum I see, you're always there to criticize. |
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rofl345Join Date: 2012-08-26
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Nice bro |
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DeviatedJoin Date: 2012-06-18
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@jetbot: well, altar kind of asked for criticism. |
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Ducky isn't serious.
He types up the most ret.arded things intentionally. He's actually much smarter.
let's cut his feet off |
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altar30Join Date: 2010-11-26
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Thanks for the support guys, and yea I respect honest feedback so what ever is on your mind :) |
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Nice rapping, keep up the good work altar.
~Real men wear pink. |
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altar30Join Date: 2010-11-26
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^ Thx bruh |
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KirbyleeJoin Date: 2008-10-09
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Theres is a Kpop song already called Neverland :| |
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altar30Join Date: 2010-11-26
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^ So what? |
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altar30Join Date: 2010-11-26
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^ Theres plenty of songs with the same names you know, and mine is Welcome To Neverland not just Neverland :/ |
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altar30Join Date: 2010-11-26
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Bump :3 |
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ducky980Join Date: 2012-09-01
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go die |
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altar30Join Date: 2010-11-26
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^ Well that's not very nice |
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DeviatedJoin Date: 2012-06-18
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^ do gie |
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altar30Join Date: 2010-11-26
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^ I guess that's better XD |
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