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{DTW Lost Hope}
Why do I think I really helped you?
Deep inside I know I can't
I sit in silence, trying to survive,
I think I can, but I can't,
Someone once said to me, I was never meant to be.
I said please get out of my life,
He didn't listen, now he thinks he made a bad decision!
I hate his guts and now he's dead...
Deep down in the darkness of my mind,
I've lost all hope, now I won't find,
My life's ambition, no inhibition,
I've lost hope in my mind
(Chorus)
One day I went outside,
God came down and cried,
"You're bloody useless,
And I don't lie"
(Solo)
(Chorus)
I've Lost Hope!
All Hope!
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I will hopefully upload a guitar tab to soon! Keep watching! |
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Thanks, it should be on youtube sometime around Christmas. :) |
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IcyclezJoin Date: 2013-03-01
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I would give it 3/10....
3 for the obvious effort, almost perfect writing, and really good lyrics. |
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... You haven't told the negative points........... Its a song were developing on, and we want feedback! |
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Who is "we" you sound like a denizen of the Anthem society and it's freaking me out man. |
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IcyclezJoin Date: 2013-03-01
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As for Negative points, it's really just the rhyming and the 'tune" of the song. That's all. |
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Who is "we" you sound like a denizen of the Anthem society and it's freaking me out man.
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LOL anthem jokes are the best |
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This isn't a ro-rap.
Even though it's better than a lot of crap I see. |
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We.... Well unfortunately I do not have enough arms to play Bass, Guitar and Drums at the same time... |
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TwizoaJoin Date: 2013-10-01
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"LOL anthem jokes are the best"
Hells yes they are. |
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@ Twiz, I'll have a look, but i'm pretty sure it is, there are instrumentals and stuff. |
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@ Twiz: 2:58. Which isn't too bad, too be honest, the bridge is awful so were probably going to change that, i'll ty and make it a bit longer. |
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DigitsGodJoin Date: 2011-04-29
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Stop acting like you're some kind of professional, little kid behind the computer. |
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'Stop acting like you're some kind of professional, little kid behind the computer.'
Umm... You spend time behind a computer to, infact, your doing it now. F.O.D. (Green Day Referance).
And I'm actually spending very little time behind a ipad, not computer, i'm just trying to share my lyrics with others to get feedback. |
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{DTW Lost Hope}
Why do you think you really helped me?
Deep inside You know you can't
I sit in silence, trying to survive,
I think I'm able, but I aren't.
(Chorus)
Someone once said to me, I was never meant to be.
I said please get out of my life,
He didn't listen, now he thinks he made a bad decision!
I hate his guts and now he's dead...
Deep down in the darkness of my mind,
I've lost all hope, now I won't find,
My life's ambition, no inhibition,
I've lost hope in my mind
(Chorus)
(Solo)
(Chorus)
I've Lost Hope!
All Hope!
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Good for OP. OP is actually going to record his work, like the ro-rapping hackjobs DON'T. |
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yay for op
the snow cracks under your feet on the fragile wood of our back stairs and im sitting alone wrapped in crawl spaces and the broken melodies heard through thin walls |
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op = obese pig
It's never ogre. |
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So, I'm an obese pig? That sucks, I wanted to be an Obese sloth... |
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Btw, added a solo and stuff to the song, I think it's like 3:20 now, so yeh. |
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