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TheRanRanRu
Join Date: 2011-11-08
Post Count: 4212
#146266981
Wednesday, September 17, 2014 10:20 PM GMT
Can one of you just check out the first few paragraphs? Just want to see if any grammer mistakes and such are in it
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MusaMansa
Join Date: 2014-09-12
Post Count: 142
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Wednesday, September 17, 2014 10:20 PM GMT
let le critique see here link please, monsieur
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TheRanRanRu
Join Date: 2011-11-08
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Wednesday, September 17, 2014 10:23 PM GMT
http://piratepad.net/udFPJKGCuf
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Laserbeak89
Join Date: 2011-09-24
Post Count: 8461
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Wednesday, September 17, 2014 11:16 PM GMT
A bit short and needs a little more detail. Why did Ran try to take over RPF, and why did he kidnap Pawz and Dai?
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TheRanRanRu
Join Date: 2011-11-08
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Thursday, September 18, 2014 12:26 AM GMT
Thats not the whole thing noob ☺
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