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I'm the main character in this :I
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It was a humid morning out on one of the many payload fields in new mexico.
There wasn't much going on today, the cart hasn't even come into sight yet and its already been an hour and a half.
"ugh...another slow morning"
She sighed as she turned and sipped from her coffee cup.
Her rifle rested on the planks of a window, looking high enough to see a quarter of the battlefield. A large knife was buckled in its sheathe attached to her belt.
She yawned and rubbed her face.
It was like a few years ago before she joined Mann co. on RED.
Spending countless hours Hunting and scanning the hillside for deer In America.
And walking mile upon mile in Australia to bow a Kangaroo.
That was all behind her for now.
Just downstairs, she heard heavy steps.
He heart began to race and she quickly she set down her rifle
and unbuttoned her kukri from her belt. She walked down the steps slowly and peered around the corner.
It was the engineer thankfully.
Relief flooded over her, and she came within the sight of the engineer.
He was building sentry and a dispenser.
"Oh hello there Ms.Sniper!"
He said sounding cheerful.
"Hey mate."
She said tipping her hat a bit.
She and engineer were close friends.
When she joined RED team, she felt kinda left out due to her short height, everyone as tall as they were, engineer was the first one to greet her.
"So how far away are they?"
She asked.
Engineer shook his head.
"They're just around the corner, but they're coming at a, pretty slow pace."
Sniper sighed.
"When do you think they'l be here?"
"In about a half hour maybe"
"Alright"
Grunted the Sniper.
"I'll keep an eye out for any BLU's out of sentry range, i'll check back soon engie"
She walked back upstairs and waited.
I it felt like only ten minutes, she could hear the cart being pushed along and the sound of the Heavy's minigun and the "poosh" of the Demoman's grenade launcher.
A couple loud "Kabooms" could be heard in those 10 minutes. it was the other Sniper, Mr.Mundy.
He was using the Awper hand, for he was letting her use his favorite rifle.
Suddenly a blue Demoman came into sight and she quickly focused onto the demoman, waiting for him to stop moving for a swift headshot. "Come on hold still" She snorted and curled her lip.
Before she squeezed down on the trigger, she heard a scream.
"Uh oh"
She whispered. It was the engineer, and under that scream was the sound of a sentry being sapped. "Bloody spys!" She said aloud through clenched teeth. She quickly set down her rifle and unsheathed her kukri and dashed down the stairs, spatting profanity.
Engineer was unharmed for now, but the BLU spy was attempting to stab him.
He noticed her coming, but then the spy did too.
Sniper ran towards the spy and swung her knife, but the spy moved with
cat like reflexes to dodge the heavy blade, just inches from his face.
The engineer grasped his wrench he dropped and hit the spy in the back.
The spy lost his balance for a second and sniper again threw her knife. It wasn't enough force to kill him with a single blow. Instead it created a shallow cut in his forehead, also creating a rip in the spys mask.
The spy barely flinched.
Sniper lunged forward with her knife in a stabbing motion, but the spy with his swiftness and speed, glided across the floor and cut the side of her face with his knife, sniper launch back to the wrong direction with her hand cupped around the wound.
The spy was back on her in a heartbeat, but with his hands, taking control of her arm with the knife.
Her grip softend on the wooden handle of the kukri, and it fell with a thump onto the floor.
The spy with his other arm yanked her neck into a choke hold and leaned against the wall, with his knife close to her neck.
In a fraction of a second a revolver is now in the spy's left hand, pointed
square at the engineer, the hammer to the revolver being pulled back with a click.
"Now" chuckled the spy. "you are defenseless"
Looking at the broken sentry that littered the floor.
Sniper grunted as she tried to pull his arm down from around her neck, but her head begins to throb and numb with the fear and thoughts roiling through my mind as she attempted to think her way out. But with the pressure building up in her head it was starting to become difficult to keep her eyes open.
Spy wasn't dumb. Many times before, he could kill off the entire team in a matter of minutes, but he had a desire to bring fear to his enemy's eyes before he cuts them off.
"OH!" he shouted. "what ever shall i do!" Spy taunted.
Engineer glanced at sniper, then he focused on his revolver in the holster.
"Don't do it." The spy said shaking his head and smiling maliciously.
But engineer didn't listen. When he pulled out his pistol to quick draw it.
Spy had already shot him. Blood pooled around engie's head.
Even though he would respawn, Sniper still didn't like seeing her friends die.
BLU spy chuckled.
"Now" He said looking down at the short little woman sniper, who's slouch hat fell off in the attack.
"I'm going to drag you away, out of sight from the approaching teams, and you are going to tell me all about the intelligence. Or i am going to have to force you to."
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Credit to Pockypewpew who i roleplayed with and gave me these ideas.
I need ideas for part 2. |
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Come on it took me two hours to write this. |
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"Come on it took me two hours to write this."
What a waste of time
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ChibtrioJoin Date: 2011-02-02
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*Crashes truck into wall of text*
*Truck Explodes*
I made a new word! It's called plagiarism! |
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"What a waste of time"
it was fun though. |
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chanlisonJoin Date: 2009-09-24
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Hope you're proud of yourself |
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"I made a new word! It's called plagiarism!"
I didn't plagiarize this... |
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ChibtrioJoin Date: 2011-02-02
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That's my Siggy. :|
I made a new word! It's called plagiarism! |
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"That's my Siggy. :|"
AHAHAHAHAHA i cant believe i didn't see that. |
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IgnysJoin Date: 2008-04-14
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Please don't be the next shadowfan |
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"Please don't be the next shadowfan"
What are you talking about? |
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IgnysJoin Date: 2008-04-14
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Are you serious?
The guy that constantly posted horrible stories that always in some way or form, involved him?
Just don't be him |
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"Are you serious?
The guy that constantly posted horrible stories that always in some way or form, involved him?
Just don't be him"
I see no issue with it. If you don't like it just ignore it.
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Tdc88Join Date: 2009-02-16
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i'm an english professor and this hurt my brain |
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shangwenJoin Date: 2010-04-29
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tl;dr get an original story instead of tf2 nerd |
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"eh you're not exactly great at descriptive writing"
I'm trying to improve on that. |
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"i'm an english professor and this hurt my brain"
I bet it did.
I'm not the best writer but i'm trying to improve.
At least its better that the story's i wrote in 6th grade.
Now you don't want to read that. |
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InkswellJoin Date: 2011-12-11
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Neat.
I always pictured sniper and engineer being buds in my head canon.
because they're both kinda..
campers.
Vote El Presidente, or else. |
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Tdc88Join Date: 2009-02-16
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one tip is that you should make the dialogue more flowing by removing a lot of the varients of he said, she said, he sighed etc.
you could just look up a guide online to how to write good dialogue or you could write without it and just summarize the points they say as "he said that..." or "they said about..." until you grasp descriptive writing more, but you should probably leave it in as it seems relatively important to the plot
another thing is that better paragraphing might improve the story, because at the moment it seems that you use a new line for almost every sentence in the story, but in parts like the first few lines, you could group them together into a paragraph
it doesn't matter if you frequently make a new paragraph, but ideally there should be some that are long and some that are short to make the writing more interesting (the general rules is to use one when introducing a new place, topic, conversation line etc.)
the general foundations are all here but you just need better formatting and some other stuff to add in |
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@tdc88 Thanks for the tip |
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YOU FORGOT THE OVERPRICED HATS AND THE SCAMMERS
0/10 |
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