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I made a role-play combing powers, mystery, horror, and school into one awesome jumble of awesomeness.
Basically it's about a boarding school, a mysterious group that has historically been known for mysterious events, powers, and murder. It also has school-type elements for people who like that kind of thing. It will have lots of horror, mystery as you try to unravel the secrets of the school, and supernatural powers.
This is basically a warning before it comes out.
opinions opinions opinions? |
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1. Who would be in charge of this school and why has it not been closed down because of murder |
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did i ever mention murder? |
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mageofpowerTop 100 PosterJoin Date: 2009-02-01
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1. Who would be in charge of this school and why has it not been closed down because of murder
Because a school wouldn't be shut down unless they could prove the facility was behind the murders.
And am I to assume that it's just a regular school, not le magicka school for special snowflake wizard children? |
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oh yeah i did
Lack of sufficient evidence has failed to close the school, nobody can really prove anything
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mageofpowerTop 100 PosterJoin Date: 2009-02-01
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Yes. You did actually.
"and murder." |
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It's a regular boarding school |
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mageofpowerTop 100 PosterJoin Date: 2009-02-01
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It's a regular boarding school
And do any of the children have special snowflake magic powers? |
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mageofpowerTop 100 PosterJoin Date: 2009-02-01
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Like elsa?
no
It's merely a phrase. I meant do any of the children at said boarding school have magical talents, or do the "power" aspects come from some otherworldly being? |
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Nobody at the school has powers.
But the power aspect does have something to do with the group of people, though they don't have some kind of supernatural ability. |
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mageofpowerTop 100 PosterJoin Date: 2009-02-01
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Well congratulations. Someone has finally made something that has piqued my interest. Don't screw up and disappoint me or I'll hunt you down. |
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Would anyone like to proof-read it before I submit it? |
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mageofpowerTop 100 PosterJoin Date: 2009-02-01
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Would anyone like to proof-read it before I submit it?
I would. |
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In a PM, on pirate pad, or what? |
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mageofpowerTop 100 PosterJoin Date: 2009-02-01
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PM would be fine. |
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Allow me to send you a PM, if you will. |
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It sounds interesting but the synopsis is too short. Then again, the plot probably COULDN'T be made into something further. |
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mageofpowerTop 100 PosterJoin Date: 2009-02-01
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It sounds interesting but the synopsis is too short. Then again, the plot probably COULDN'T be made into something further.
It did what it needed to do. It's not necessary to drown a potential RPer with an overly long synopsis. Length does not necessarily correlate with quality. |
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I couldn't include too much information in the introduction. It's supposed to provide a basic overview, while maintaining a mysterious quality. I don't see anything I could really do to lengthen it either. I would have to draw it out to increase the length, which would require extra time for no reason except to make it look longer. |
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* Then realizes he was talking about the role-play as a whole *
I maintain my point. |
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Clever trick not using the word school until someone clicked. |
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