ChichlandJoin Date: 2011-02-21
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An Allusionary Display - Orange Crush
Excelling at life is the one thing better than the rhymes I expel
Well, that is other than winning all the quells, I run the rap business for the good of the clientele
I sound more polite than French dudes saying mademoiselle
My words stick with you, I go hard like caramel
To announce the massacre of this verse they'll be ringing more than a death knell
I call all the haters out like a resurrected Alexander G. Bell
I compute my lyrics faster than a Dell
Bruising up my critics is not good enough, my goal is to make their body swell
Most people go the common route but I've gone awry, Robert Frost
I've written better literature than the classic Goethe's Faust
To detect my meaning you'll need a private eye
Others have trouble coming up with good lyrics but I have an oversupply
Royal and important like the palace Versailles
My foes jump at the gun but I've been keeping them on standby
I, as a lyricist, am incomparable which is not surprising
I do this solo, because nothing rhymes with Orange
I'm a virus, infectious, and I destroy like a lysin
I've been making my enemies go extinct like the bison
My references are so sweet that they contain glycine
This verse wasn't my best, but my prime is on the horizon
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ChichlandJoin Date: 2011-02-21
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I should make an album lol |
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ChichlandJoin Date: 2011-02-21
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ChichlandJoin Date: 2011-02-21
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None responds *cries* |
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So this is a Freestyle.
Didn't know what it was about.
6/10. |
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jubey27Join Date: 2010-12-06
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Here's a respond :) I didn't read it all though, it'd take me like 5 minutes |
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ChichlandJoin Date: 2011-02-21
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Honestly wasn't that much. More allusions to other things and wordplay than anything else. Even the title was wordplay.
Thank you for the rate tho |
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ChichlandJoin Date: 2011-02-21
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ChichlandJoin Date: 2011-02-21
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bump once again
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LulDoniJoin Date: 2015-03-03
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6/10 |
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ChichlandJoin Date: 2011-02-21
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Much obliged |
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ChichlandJoin Date: 2011-02-21
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ChichlandJoin Date: 2011-02-21
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"Excelling at life is the one thing better than the rhymes I expel
Well, that is other than winning all the quells, I run the rap business for the good of the clientele"
Perfect start 9/10 so far.
"I sound more polite than French dudes saying mademoiselle
My words stick with you, I go hard like caramel
To announce the massacre of this verse they'll be ringing more than a death knell
I call all the haters out like a resurrected Alexander G. Bell"
Looking like a tryhard , but good punchlines. Still 9/10
"I compute my lyrics faster than a Dell"
Horrible bar honestly.
8.7/10 now.
"Bruising up my critics is not good enough, my goal is to make their body swell
Most people go the common route but I've gone awry, Robert Frost
I've written better literature than the classic Goethe's Faust"
Nice Rhyming but its boring and your vocabulary is making you look like a tryhard
8.5/10 now.
"To detect my meaning you'll need a private eye
Others have trouble coming up with good lyrics but I have an oversupply
Royal and important like the palace Versailles "
The 2nd bar on this part is way too long and it ruins your flow.
Still 8.5
"My foes jump at the gun but I've been keeping them on standby
I, as a lyricist, am incomparable which is not surprising
I do this solo, because nothing rhymes with Orange "
Nice punchline but theres not multis on the entire song.
Went down to a 8.2
"I'm a virus, infectious, and I destroy like a lysin
I've been making my enemies go extinct like the bison
My references are so sweet that they contain glycine
This verse wasn't my best, but my prime is on the horizon"
Ive heard this way too many times but the rhyme scheme is dope.
8.5/10
Overall: 8.5/10 |
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ChichlandJoin Date: 2011-02-21
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Thank you Kenzie! I appreciate it. |
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ChichlandJoin Date: 2011-02-21
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I apologize for my vocabulary tho lol. |
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7/10
Pretty dope.
That dell line was pretty bad though. |
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