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is it filled with too much fluff?
recent imperfect example:
Phoebe leaned straight back within the seat, with her arms crossed sightly against her chest. She glared out the window with a rather upset expression, her eyebrows furrowed together as she pondered about the time of the event of when they would finally arrive at school. It was bad enough this trip was taking what it felt like hours, might as well be weeks, but the silence was just plain annoying to her. With a stiff neck, she turned over towards the other person who appeared to be sitting across from her. She leaned forward, and coughed briefly in her hand to clear her throat, before speaking. "H... Hey! Hey, what's your name?"
*Sitting Alone In A Corner* [Diary Entry #932] Well Im Here, Last Man On Earth I Used The World Scaner No One's Here, No one to Talk To, No One To Go Outside With Me I Think This Is It For Me, Goodbye World. |
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"My name is Bond, James Bond." He replied.
In all seriousness though, I think it is fine. |
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is k
will you turn it into a story that lasts 10hrs |
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idk worried that my rping and my posts in general are too long for no reason except that i just like typing
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nothing wrong with long posts
unless they're like
6 long paragraphs describing a foot |
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hh alright
thanks ultra
*Sitting Alone In A Corner* [Diary Entry #932] Well Im Here, Last Man On Earth I Used The World Scaner No One's Here, No one to Talk To, No One To Go Outside With Me I Think This Is It For Me, Goodbye World. |
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My foot is the footiest foot, the smelliest foot of foots. They are the largest foot of foots and are called my feet because they have a feat over all other foots. Other foots are jealous because my foot is pink. A pink foot is better than tan foot.
My foot is the footiest foot of the foot empire because it is the gigantic, pink and purple stripped tentacle foot with a ton of tiny feet on those tentacles. My foot is special because it is the footiest of foots because it is a alien foot with tentacles and tiny foots on them.
My foot is the footiest foot because it was gold. A golden, gigantic, pink, purple striped tentacle foot with a tony of tiny feet on those tentacles laid with gold. You are jealous of my foot because it is the footiest foot of all. Did I mention it knows Karate? It can beat a 1,000 feet because it is the footiest of the foot.
If you try to foot my foot of the footiest of the foot empire then you will be kicked by my Karate foot. You are jealous of my foot because it is special, a special alien foot. That is why it is the footiest foot of the foot empire in the entire foot universe and laid with gold. I stole the good from other foot.
By this time I wonder why you are still reading this, unless you are foot jealous of the footiest of the foot. My foot is both small adn large, it can transform, you are jealous of my footiest foot of the foot empire and foot universe in the entire alien foot species. Jelly.
And that is where I end my paragraph about the footiest foot of the foot empire in the foot universe. A gigantic, small and large, pink and purple stripped, tentacle ridden with tiny feet, golden foot.
I took the 6 paragraph about a foot dare. |
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PawzKatJoin Date: 2012-04-22
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Not at all, I wish I could incorporate more fluffy details into my writing. I'm envious. ;p |
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birmie123Join Date: 2014-05-08
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personally i think that it's good to add loads of detail
although i've met some people that think detail is good but there can be too much detail
minecraft hard drilling is my favorite |
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I personally like longer replies. |
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""My name is Bond, James Bond." He replied."
sorry but i need to do this
"Bond, James Bond" replied a calm voice from the other side. With deep staring eyes her unexpected visitor pondered into her presence as she couldn't but ask herself from where the envoy of espionage had come from. A dark silhouette laid beyond the impeccable suit he wore with pride, making her inmediatly aknowledge the danger it meant to even raise her voice to him.
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evilboo10Join Date: 2011-09-20
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I don't see anything wrong with it at all. |
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Meanwhile, in the other seat, a drunkard is swinging around a bottle of v0dka and screaming "Bush did 9/11!" before getting thrown off the bus. Sadly for James Bond, that was the guy who planted the bomb under his seat. Also the guy who has the detonator. With a single click, Jame's seat explodes into dust, blowing his legs off and his body into the roof of the bus, and making Phoebe fall back into her seat as shrapnel scratched and hit her face, causing her to go blind in one eye, and the bus to stop as a wheel was blown off in the process. |
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birmie123Join Date: 2014-05-08
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when evil boo posts
minecraft hard drilling is my favorite |
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CrystakylJoin Date: 2011-04-23
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I think it's great to put detail into posts and make them fluffy. Fluffy things are the best.
~ "Long live the purple shirt." ~ |
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PawzKatJoin Date: 2012-04-22
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when evil boo posts[x2] |
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evilboo10Join Date: 2011-09-20
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when evil boo posts [x3] |
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when evil boo posts [x4]
dude i missed you
where have you been?
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Pick, your writing is glorious. As a D&D DM, I wish I could describe things in such great detail. |
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foot paragraphs be invading |
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PawzKatJoin Date: 2012-04-22
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I wish I could describe things in such great detail.[x2] |
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aw you guys flatter me too much <3
thanks |
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PawzKatJoin Date: 2012-04-22
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But of course. You're an incredible writer, and your characters are among my favourites. |
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vamking12Join Date: 2010-05-08
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Pick is k |
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"your writing is glorious. As a D&D DM, I wish I could describe things in such great detail."
This is what happens when flattery turns into lying |
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