[DISCLAIMER] I am not trying to bring offense to you, I'm just nitpicking everyone's speech.
"fellow members of America!" Members? You mean citizens? members make it sound like the US is a group (like irl usa)
" a Special Response Team member for S.W.A.T" Not a government spot. It's LE.
"I think it is time for me to run for a Government Official rank!" Probs since you failed at Mayor elections.
"I have been wondering if I should be a Government Official since i joined and I have decided that I should become one." You decided that one election ago.
"I have been wondering if I should be a Government Official since i joined and I have decided that I should become one" and " I enjoy working with My fellow government members and will continue!" Doesn't make sense since you said you wanted to decide you wanted to now but you said you would "continue" to work with your "fellow" government members. 2 sins on this one.
This speech is one of the few speeches that are hella short yet can be filled in filler content. +5 sins.
"Copyright" Betting 10 bucks you didn't actually copyright this.
"I will be mature always On duty,I will accept my consequences if I do something wrong and I will be an active House of Representative." One: You falsely capitalized the on in on duty. Two: I will be an active *representative. You don't say House of Representative as a member of it, you say Representative.
This speech had little to no detail at all (No offense) and it barely had any proof you actually know what you would you would be doing as a rep, or your plans as a rep. +7 sins for none of these.
TALLY:
Sin Counter: 21
VERDICT: I can't possibly verdict this. I don't know what to put here.
In mother russia, you don't make signatures, signatures make YOU. |