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#186767981Tuesday, April 05, 2016 1:02 AM GMT

What sounds better? Yet words are stripped of benefit when nothing remains to be said Yet words can do no good when nothing is left unsaid

Loyal2One

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#186768398Tuesday, April 05, 2016 1:08 AM GMT

Or any combination of the two? Or you could just say "they both suck!"

YungSmoke

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#186768682Tuesday, April 05, 2016 1:12 AM GMT

I can't choose because I can't fit it in with the rest of the writing.

Loyal2One

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#186768911Tuesday, April 05, 2016 1:15 AM GMT

The bitter taste of parting still grips my tongue But words do no right when nothing remains to be said What is left: A memory of a memory, A nocturnal iteration, A tantalizing ambiance And I would have it no other way I know it's rough but if you could give me any suggestions without absolutely condemning it that'd be nice

Cudbert

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#186769567Tuesday, April 05, 2016 1:24 AM GMT

AA judgement could be more more clearly if you gave us some context

Loyal2One

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#186769898Tuesday, April 05, 2016 1:28 AM GMT

Poetry is a form of literature that uses aesthetic and rhythmic qualities of language to evoke meanings in addition to, or in place of, the prosaic ostensible meaning - wikipedia So it's open to interpretation. There is no set context. I know what it means to me, and if it is passable, it may mean something completely different to you

Loyal2One

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#186769964Tuesday, April 05, 2016 1:30 AM GMT

Is it cringey? Does it make you think? Does it flow well?

YungSmoke

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#186769990Tuesday, April 05, 2016 1:30 AM GMT

Lose your girlfriend m8? Jk nvm, I would say... Yet words can leave regret when the unsaid is spoken. But if I had to choose I would go with number 2.

zenazebra

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#186770038Tuesday, April 05, 2016 1:31 AM GMT

the second one

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#186770375Tuesday, April 05, 2016 1:35 AM GMT

Ha no, Yung. I was given a prompt, "A Bitter Taste," and I decided to come up with a story in the form of an unconventional poem