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It's still in progress, but I'd like to know if you guys think it needs a lot more or just some finishing touches. If so, what do you think it needs? I'll try and make it as best as I can, I'd just like the community's feedback.
https://www.roblox.com/games/385228191/Excelsior-Studios
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SvgTyJoin Date: 2013-03-22
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Detail detail detail. That's the main thing EBR focuses on |
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So some more of that I suppose. Got it.
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KitorariJoin Date: 2014-04-07
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It looks Awesome, but just to me, it feels small and cramped, which might just be me picking on a detail that doesn't really matter in the end.
also try make more detailed mountains, using the triangle terrain.
*Sorry if this doesn't help x)*
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Alright, thanks for you advice Cloudlly!
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...what is EBR?
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clu37Join Date: 2010-03-27
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It lacks a variety of materials, something that EBR might look for in the actual building itself, not the details. Details are important as well, make sure you have enough of it. The space does feel cramped though, you might want to work on expanding the place and using an NPC model as a guide. I would constructively criticise it more, but I simply walked around the place..
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Ok, you're responses have been very helpful, and I would like to point out that the cramped space is intentional, I think it helps to bring the smaller details into focus instead of giving a broader view to the player, but if that many people think it is problematic, I may be able to fix it.
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Sorry for the amount of bumps, but I've made a lot of updates. I wasn't able to really remove the cramped feeling though, sorry. Anyways, any more criticism you guys have helps!
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ExzeptionJoin Date: 2011-11-01
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spend at least >2 minutes5 cubic studs< very detailed
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FPSPwnz0rJoin Date: 2011-06-27
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It looks cool but it needs more detail in the terrain and on certain walls.
I'm guessing this is because it's a WIP though
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Alrght, wall detail and more terrain work, got it.
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Bump once again, made a ton of updates, tried to fill in the more open spaces.
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KitorariJoin Date: 2014-04-07
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Gonna add my suggestion again,
You should work on the stairs and the hallway to the quarters, its very bland, and maybe put some detail on the window, and put some lights in there, its very dark and putting lighting in, maybe some special lighting, would make it better.
Sorry if that doesn't help, but it looks nice!
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Funny you say that Cloudlly, I was actually just busy making the roof of the hallway look like a bunch of stars as the lights.
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KitorariJoin Date: 2014-04-07
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Oh okay, Sorry X)
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No problem, I take all criticism as areas I can work on, not insults.
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It looks great. However, it does need a lot more improvement if you want to enter EBR.
I enjoyed most of what I saw. Add more. It feels like your place is missing a lot of things (can't really name anything since it was only a short walk and leave). More details isn't really an priority for you, just try to find more things to put in.
One other thing that is really throwing me off is the triangle terrain. It looks poorly done and I hate it, sorry. I recommend removing it and do other options if you can't make it look nice. |
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Alright, if you guys have any specifics of things that you think need renovating, I can work on that too.
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osemadiusJoin Date: 2014-01-26
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EBR wants something creative and unique to look at. Details alone will not get you into EBR. |
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Ok, that entry was denied. I could do better though, I'll keep you guys updates on my next entry in another thread.
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sayhisam1Join Date: 2009-11-25
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It's good, but I don't think its EBR level.
For one, alot of your walls are really plain or just rely on Roblox's built in textures to decorate it. Instead of relying on things like diamondplate, make your own design.
Also, there's a lot of smooth plastic, which looks really bad and undetailed.
Next, you need to work on some features like your Bed or the trees - They look really undermade, and your sofas could use a bit of work as well.
This is nitpicking though - It's really good overall.
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