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This is my first story, so CONSTRUCTIVE critism is allowed.
The story is about a girl who has to deal with a war, noobs invading, and a family death. She keeps a journal of the daily events that occur, and adresses them to her "Future Friends." She plans to bury the diary, so that people in the future can learn about the past. The story takes place in the future. The year of 2083 to be exact.
Prolouge:
7-15-83
Dear Future Friends,
When I woke up today, I heard a strange noice at the door. I opened the door and looked around. In front of me, stands a noob. He says "C4N 1 H4v3 T1x pL0x?1?!?!"
"NO!!!!" I scream as I slam the door in his face.
I think to myself "Wow, that's the fourth time this week a noob has done that... Is this some kind of April Fool's joke?!?!?"
The doorbell rings.
I open the door and scream, "NO I WILL NOT GIVE YOU TICKETS!"
Then, I realize it's just my friend Christine.
She says that a noob has been coming to her house every morning for 4 days now. I tell her that it's happening to me too. What should I do?
~Emilie |
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If you would like to be in the story, please fill out this fourm. Thanx.
Please not that Emilie is not my real name, but a fictional character.
Also, for the "Name" Please do not put your real name, but just what you want your name to be in the story.
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chaseer3Join Date: 2008-05-22
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Good idea for a story, though, I do think something more... "Deadly" would've given it more suspense. Good work, though.
Name: Leon M. Smith
Personality: Intelligent, very helpful. Happy sometimes, but not overly happy.
Boy or Girl: Boy |
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AcesIayerJoin Date: 2010-06-30
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name:bobard
personality:does whatever and wears whatever he likes
boy |
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Name: Bea
Personality: Nice,Kind, not afraid to hurt somebody if she needs too,shy
Boy or Girl: Girl |
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AcesIayerJoin Date: 2010-06-30
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can I start? |
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Thanks, chaseer.
I'll try to get you all in tonight or tomorrow morning. If I can't do it tomorrow morning, I'll do it tomorrow night. I have camp during the day, so I'll work my hardest to fit you all in. |
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@Aces
What do you mean?
English, pl0x? |
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chaseer3Join Date: 2008-05-22
Post Count: 7932 |
I don't think Aces understands that this is a story, not a roleplay. :/ |
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matoro66Join Date: 2009-03-06
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Name: Matoro
Personality: Humble,wise,Mysterious,But when a friend is in trouble,or feels bad,I help them,no matter what.
Boy or Girl: Boy |
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Chapter 1:
A New Friend
7-16-86
(12:00 AM)
(Midnight)
We decided to take a late night walk in the park, as it always gives us ideas.
I forgot to mention, we had a sleepover. My parents think we're still asleep, but they haven't a clue.
"Look, over there, Emilie!" Christina gasped.
"Where?" I said in suprise.
"Over there!" She says again.
"That strange shadow?" I asked.
"YES!" She said, relieved.
"Let's go check it out!" I said excitedly.
"I'm not sure about this, Emilie..." Christina whispered, unsure.
But I had already ran ahead to check out what was making that strange shadow.
"Wait, Emilie!" Christina yelled.
I approached the dark figure, revealing a boy who looked like he was a teenager, like me.
"The name's Smith. Leon M. Smith, that is." He said, pointing his fedora down, towards the ground below.
"There is a time of great war approaching. I must warn you, It will be tough, but in the end, It will all make sense.
~Emilie |
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@Chaseer
I think you're right... xD |
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matoro66Join Date: 2009-03-06
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Your doing awesome for a first timer. |
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YAY! MATORO IS HERE! :D
Matoro: BEST. STORYWRITER. EVAR. |
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matoro66Join Date: 2009-03-06
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Really? Ive seen better.
Thanks dande. ;D |
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Oh, thank j00 matoro. =3
This is my first story on here. I've done FFs on other sites, but not here. Apparently I am a "Wonderful writer of wonderfulness"
Lol someone said that to me... |
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matoro66Join Date: 2009-03-06
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Well,you are an awesome story writer. Your doing as good as me. |
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chaseer3Join Date: 2008-05-22
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That's exactly how I wanted to be portrayed. Thank you... *Cry*... So much... :'D |
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Lol... Your welcome.... ? |
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so, in this story, do we all right one chapter? |
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@Kool
At some point in the story, some people will be asked to write a part of the story.
Other things, like recruting a friend, can get you a spot on the admin list.
Normal post:
Admin list:
Dandelion212
matoro66 |
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chaseer3Join Date: 2008-05-22
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I'm not begging or anything, but I would love to write a part for this. If you have any thoughts for having other people write, please think of me! :D |
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Write. Nao.
As I dance like an idiot.
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Well, I have to go on the sidewalk of a busy street, bring a radio, and dance like an idiot, so, seeya in 5 min. |
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