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Chapter one-The begining.
Late Robloxia,Forum and Robloxland news
"Hello,it is Telamon.I have had a recent invention,which can cause lag to stop.Oblibarate it,all robloxians will get the injection immedatly.A man will knock at their door,if you are sleeping you will get it at a later date"
"No way am I getting some injection"Muttered thejuiceypie.
Back to Forum Fighters.
The fighters take the injection.
And they Destroy each other.
Thejuiceypie pets his puppys head.
Two years later.
Thejuiceypie was in the Forum.He sat in the grass,holding a shotgun.He seen a deer.He aimed it at its head,but a Wild Noob jumped on it and roared.Thejuiceypie shot the noob and the deer.
His dog barked,He left the noob and ate the deer.
Night.
Thejuiceypie had barricaded himself in his happy home in robloxia,to get around he uses portals.He hid in bathtub,with his dog and shotgun,Laughter and Rawring ncould be heard.
Creek came from down stairs.
To be continued. |
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3/10. Several plot holes, poor grammar and spelling. |
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He has a flashback about the plot, |
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FirruuJoin Date: 2008-06-13
Post Count: 14856 |
-1/10. Please pass grade three English before attempting to write. |
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7/10. I like TheJuicyPie's storys. |
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Well, it's not much of a story if he doesn't post Chapter 2. |
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Chapter two.The flashback.
A screaming noise was heard,him and his dog went flying out of the bathtub.Another Screaming noise was heard,Then another.He got up and picked up the shotgun,
"Hello" he said,as a shadow was seen beneath his door.He slowly opened it.
A infected,4ft4,Long claws and Red eyes stared at him,about to attack.He shot his gun at it taking its head off.He quickly Closed the door.
He then remeber the uprising.
"Me next" Said a robloxian taking the injection.
"Here you go" Said Telamon
"Thanks" The Robloxian shouted walking away.
"No more lag" they sang,dancing around.
"Get in there" Shouted a Robloxian.
"No more injections for today"
"You do realise you done about 1,000,000 Robloxians and about 1,000,000 skipped and there is about 504 in line."Said thejuiceypie
"Smart one hey?" One day ban.
"Wha---"
Thejuiceypie appered in a cell in banland,
One day later.
He appered in the empty room.
"Telamon banning me" Shouted thejuiceypie opening the door.it was sunset,people were running away screaming.He followed them.
"What happend" he asked a runner.
"It it-" He ignored him and ran to the great bridge of robloxia.
"We can Escape" shouted telamon.
All of the population were in a giant line,to get on the plane.
After one hour, He finally got infront.
"Last flight" Said Telamon.
A young kid and his older brother started to cry.
"Here you two go"Said thejuiceypie
"Thank you I hope you great luck against the infected"
"Infected?" Thejuiceypie asked
The plane took of and shot at the bridge blowing it up,he turned around to see Several infected run at him.
"Oh hell no" Shouted thejuiceypie.
"Here" shouted the kid,kicking down the trench gun.
"I hope you good luck" Shouted the eldest |
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Shall I post more or let it die? |
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Dude,learn some spelling or grammar then come back with a story. Plus I don't really get the plot. 2/10. |
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