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Booigeman1999
#63394631Saturday, February 25, 2012 2:20 AM GMT

It was a cold and wet fall day. As Military Police rush down the halls of the school. Many people can hear them yelling and the feet running up and down the stairs “Get Up!” . We were the next class next to the one that was just rushed. Then they come in and yell “Get Up! We have a warrant for the arrest of a Spy!”. Then everyone froze besides the MPs that were talking about the warrant. As they took two kids out of the classroom and cuffed them. We were all froze and thinking “Could they be the spies they were talking about?”. After that the MPs comes back in and arrests the teacher. She yells ”What are you doing! I haven’t done anything!” Then another MP comes into the 6th grade math room and says “All is good but there’s a spy in this school. I need you all to stay were you are and talk with your friend and don’t mind the people yelling.”. And that was the end of that. When the MPs left everyone looked out in the hall. It was the quietest it has ever been. No one moved. No one talked. No one yelled. Just nothing. The day went as it always did. Some classes had no teachers. Most were gone. Many kids were missing because of the MPs when that took them. They took my friend, two of my classmates and one of my teachers. The two classmates were a boy and a girl. They came back to school two days later. No one knew why they came besides about a Spy. They said the spy was still roaming around and is in the 6th grade. That’s all we know. Then something happens 3 days after the Raid on the school. Someone is found dead. They show it’s a Russian’s knife. Then they though the spy was Russian. They were wrong…
Booigeman1999
#63394742Saturday, February 25, 2012 2:22 AM GMT

I also need feedback. If can give some, please do.
Deathgirl24
#63395268Saturday, February 25, 2012 2:32 AM GMT

I can already tell by the first paragraph that it needs grammar editing.
Booigeman1999
#63418455Saturday, February 25, 2012 4:08 PM GMT

I don't have the best grammar. But I am working on it.
ultimatepotato356
#63420282Saturday, February 25, 2012 4:41 PM GMT

It is ok.
Deathgirl24
#63423242Saturday, February 25, 2012 5:25 PM GMT

Boo, I can edit the grammar for you and re-post it.

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