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Not just another fanfiction, more like the Diaries of a Snow Lover urban legend, but a bit more Slenderman themed. Basically, I'll randomly come up with the 'journal' of a Slenderman victim
Journal 1
Entry 1: March 14, 2005. Friday 4:08 PM
School is FINALLY out. We had lots of tests today. I really don't want to see another piece of paper with questions on it for a LOOOONG time. But at least they are extending our normal 2 day break to 2 weeks
Entry 2: March 16, 2005 Sunday 12:42 PM
Had some pretty disturbing dreams last not. Some really tall skinny dude with a tux on and no face. Chasing me through the forest. In the dream he picked me up and impaled me on a tree branch. On the way back from Church I SWEAR I saw the same figure from my dream while we were driving past a park. I need to search this
Entry 3: March 16, 2005 Sunday 4:59 PM
Ended up finding out what he is called. Dude is dubbed Slenderman. Apparently kidnaps kids and murders adults. Pretty sure I didn't see him back there, but I need to be careful about this
Entry 4: March 16, 2005 Sunday 5:05 PM
I know for sure I saw him this time. I was walking to the bathroom when I happened to look right out the window. He was hiding amongst some short trees. Didn't conceal him. Nearly made me crap myself.
Entry 5: March 17, 2005 Monday 3:26 AM
I swear I heard some footsteps outside earlier. I don't think I'm going to be able to fall asleep. I also just noticed I'm about to run out of
Entry 6: June 14, 2005 Wednesday 10:55 AM
Finally got a new journal. I was too paranoid to go outside, and my computer is being all weird. I hope I didn't get a virus. This must be Slenderman's doing. I've been seeing him a lot more lately
Entry 7: June 16, 2005 Friday 12:52 PM
I think I'm going crazy! I need to get out of here!!! I can't take it any more! Please let this be all one long nightmare!
Entry 8: July 6, 2005 Tuesday 1:36 PM
(Several drawings of Slenderman, all with an X drawn through the face. Also, numerous crazy sentences have been scrawled all over the page. Stuff like He Is WATCHING ME!, nonononononoNONONONONONONONO!!!!!!!!!!!!, and several circles with an X scrawled through it)
Entry 11: December 20, 2005 Monday 3:24 PM
They all think I'm crazy. They say I'm being silly. They d(X)n't kn(X)w what I'm g(X)ing thr(X)ugh. I d(X)'t kn(X)W what I'm g(X)ing thr(X)ugh. I'm t(X)(X) afraid t(X) even g(X) int(X) an(X)ther r(X)(X)m. They are bringing me t(X) a phyciatrist, (X)r h(X)wever y(X)u spell it, T(X)m(X)rr(X)w. I can't g(X). He'll get me. HE'LL GET ME!!!!!!!!! (X)(X)(X)(X)(X)(X)
Entry 12: December 21, 2005 Tuesday 5:54 PM
It was a nightmare I saw....HIM t(X)(X) many times He's right (X)utside me h(X)use I can't g(X) g(X) g(X) But I'm being drawn t(X)wards him I am g(X)ing to die
Entry 13: December 22, 2005 Wednesday 6:00 PM
I have claimed the boy, welcomed him with open arms. He is now one amongst many of my proxy army. Now to take care of his folk. His journal has been most helpful
The next day a house burned to the ground, with most of the inhabitents impaled on trees a few miles away. The boy was missing |
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vladskiJoin Date: 2012-12-01
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It needs to be longer, and better developed. |
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Longer? Really?
Thanks for the criticism though. I'll try to develop it better next time |
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Well, by longer I mean more detailed you know? You should check out Seeking Truth & The Mystic, to get a good idea. It's better to associate, with the characters when you go into more detail, and how the presence of The Slender Man effects him psychologically |
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Yeah.
Like have the first few entries feel like they're from an actual journal.
And then slowly escalate the slender occurrences into insanity |
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vinferferJoin Date: 2008-09-20
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Murders adults?
OH GOD WHY. |
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@vinferf
No one knows
@Ultra/Leslie
Mmhm. Ok, thanks for the...uh...whaddya call it?(I just woke up, takes me a while to recall things in that 30 minute period) |
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super142Join Date: 2010-05-16
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SayxtorJoin Date: 2012-12-01
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It's okay. It could use a little more detail and description. |
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kiki1811Join Date: 2012-03-16
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This reminds me of something that happened in RL... O_O |
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I'll post another one in the afternoon. A mom's point of view this time. I'm gonna feel so awkward writing it
I haven't been claimed by Slenderman...yet. Yet |
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I have.
I couldn't resist the temptation, he came to me in the form of Emma Stone.
I got down and dirty, with Slender Man.
NOT AN FACT THAT I AM PROUD OFF. |
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>cliched
>unoriginal
>underdeveloped
>not scary
1/10 would not read again |
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>Cliched: Dunno how to respond. How is it cliched?
>Unoriginal: I know, this is based off of Diaries of a Snow Lover
>Underdeveloped: I'm working on that
>Not scary: Who said it was meant to be scary? |
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It's cliched because it has everything that's been done a million times. An abruptly end for one of the entries, "I'm going crazy / I'm not crazy omg!!!!", "Omg im being watched!!!!", the Operator symbol.
If you're going to base it off something at least TRY to have some originality.
It should have been more developed to begin with, never post an unfinished story.
It's about the Slender Man, surely it's a comedy? |
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Ok, I can see how its cliched, I'm working on developing it better, and I'll try to keep it original next time
Believe it or not I've seen comedies about Slenderman(he's a meme, there is everything from comedies to popcorn about him). Didn't bother with links though
But I'm too much of a amateur to actually make it really scary, so if you wanted horror, this isn't the spot |
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Those are called parodies. There are plenty of resources online to improve your writing, check them out. |
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Why bother with a slow computer/interweb connection when I could go to my language arts teacher? Or my mom
I just had to argue. I actually do not know any, and google never works for me |
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Well I know the Internet is better at giving resources about horror stories than your mom. |
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I'm not trying to write a horror. I'm writing...idk what to call it
And my mom is a bit of a writer, so I could always ask her |
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